1. Posted: October 25, 2018In:

    Two cops must stop a drug cartel from unleashing his narcotic on the city before everyone becomes addicted.

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    I share the concerns of the others.? And the logline is grammatically flawed.? ?First impressions are everything in a logline.

    I share the concerns of the others.? And the logline is grammatically flawed.? ?First impressions are everything in a logline.

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  2. Posted: October 24, 2018In:

    When her orbital city of New Delhi is destroyed, a spirited Indian girl escapes to Freedom city determined to join the space force and take down the evil prophet of New Babylon, who?s responsible for the loss of everyone she loved.?

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    >>>With giant orbital space citiesSeems to be the story hook. More to the point:? what is the story hook for you?? What draws you into this story?And what's the backstory on the orbiting space cities?? Do they exist because of necessity or opportunity?? That is, do they exist because humansRead more

    >>>With giant orbital space cities

    Seems to be the story hook. More to the point:? what is the story hook for you?? What draws you into this story?

    And what’s the backstory on the orbiting space cities?? Do they exist because of necessity or opportunity?? That is, do they exist because humans had to flee the earth because it became inhabitable?? Or do they exist because? humans just can?

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  3. Posted: October 24, 2018In:

    Two recently graduated teens must hitchhike across the country in order to make the most out of their summer.

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    >>>?to make the most Vague and seems to refer to the subjective story rather than the objective story.? (See my comments about the other logline about the AP students.)

    >>>?to make the most

    Vague and seems to refer to the subjective story rather than the objective story.? (See my comments about the other logline about the AP students.)

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