Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
An adventurous archaeologist in the 1930s must track down and recover the lost Ark of the Covenant before it falls into the hands of the Nazis.
A swashbuckling archaeologist must find the Ark of the Covenant before the Nazis do. (14 words)A "high concept" version.I don't think it necessary to include the time period, "the 1930's.? The word? "Nazis" nails the general time period.? And "Ark of the Covenant", the irresistible story hook, instaRead more
A swashbuckling archaeologist must find the Ark of the Covenant before the Nazis do.
(14 words)
A “high concept” version.
I don’t think it necessary to include the time period, “the 1930’s.? The word? “Nazis” nails the general time period.? And “Ark of the Covenant”, the irresistible story hook, instantly tells how important the quest is, how high the stakes are.
?
See lessAfter her student goes missing, the teacher in-charge sets up a “search and rescue” with his best friends before their field trip ends.
variable:If he's a prankster, why not?? Who is the more interesting character?And you tag the genre as adventure.? Well, whose adventure is it -- the poor distraught teacher, or the prankster-prone kid?? And how can it be an adventure for her?? It seems more like her worst nightmare as a teacher.I rRead more
variable:
If he’s a prankster, why not?? Who is the more interesting character?
And you tag the genre as adventure.? Well, whose adventure is it — the poor distraught teacher, or the prankster-prone kid?? And how can it be an adventure for her?? It seems more like her worst nightmare as a teacher.
I recently re-viewed an old flick? (a personal favorite for no rational reason) about a cowboy who steals a prize horse being showcased in Las Vegas and disappears into the desert.
And everybody is looking for him.? But nobody can find him.? Except for one resourceful, relentless reporter.
But the story is not told from the reporter’s pov,? Why?? Because, among other things, more than 1/2 the “fun and games” scenes (per Blake Snyder) belong to the cowboy.? All the ways he eludes being caught.
It seems to me that a good logline ought to evoke “fun and games” scenes in the mind of a reader.? Which is another way of describing what constitutes a strong hook.? A hooks grab attention — and inspires the imagination.
So which character has the potential for more “fun and games” moments in your concept, the kid or the teacher?? Which one inspires your imagination more?
The news story I cited earlier about the kid who got lost in the L.A. sewer system:? Which is the more interesting? aspect of the story, the one people really want to know about?? The efforts of the fine people to find him?? Or his misadventure in the sewer?
Obviously any dramatization would cut back and forth between the rescue effort, the distraught parents and the kid.? But, really,? who is involved in the inciting incident?? Who initiates the action — the kid or the rescuers?? Who owns that news story? Who owns the story hook?
And by the way, what is the story hook in your premise?
fwiw
See lessTrapped in his outer body experience, a pro lucid dreamer cooperates with his skeptic rivals to wake up before the league organizer reaps their awareness.
What's the difference between a "pro lucid dreamer" and a "lucid dreamer"? I have? a very vivid dream life including lucid dreams but "reaps their awareness" is vague; I have no idea what that means, what the story is really about.? (And lucid dreaming is an in body experience.) fwiw
What’s the difference between a “pro lucid dreamer” and a “lucid dreamer”?
I have? a very vivid dream life including lucid dreams but “reaps their awareness” is vague; I have no idea what that means, what the story is really about.? (And lucid dreaming is an in body experience.)
fwiw
See less