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  1. Posted: January 21, 2017In: War

    A French village and pacifist priest must work with a bloodthirsty resistance group to fight invading Nazi’s and save 5000 Jews from extermination using only their Protestant values, an amateur forger and a one-legged female spy. *True Holocaust Story*

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    Added an answer on January 21, 2017 at 11:53 am

    >>>should I just focus on using the most compelling character to get my script through the door?I'm face a similar predicament in the script I'm currently writing based on the true story of how women finally got the vote in the USA. ?In terms of historical fact, my protagonist was not the lRead more

    >>>should I just focus on using the most compelling character to get my script through the door?

    I’m face a similar predicament in the script I’m currently writing based on the true story of how women finally got the vote in the USA. ?In terms of historical fact, my protagonist was not the leading character in the struggle. ?Many feminist historians consider her a marginal character, a damned nuisance who set the movement back; they believe women got the vote in spite of her militant tactics, not because of them.

    But she is f-a-r and away the most interesting character, the most colorful and controversial, the bravest and most daring. ?She defied the conventions and stereotypes of her sex, broke all the rules was willing to risk her life for what she believed in. ?And Hollywood loves characters who defy conventions and stereotypes, who breaks the rules, who are willing to risk losing everything for a worthy cause. ?So I see her as a no-brainer, slam-dunk choice for the protagonist.

    Notice, that I framed my logline for your concept with the female as someone who “helped to save”. ?I didn’t say she organized and ran the rescue effort. ?I presume it was the priest. ?And other colorful and diverse characters played an important role. ?But ?surely ?she played a pivotal role, did she not?

    There’s not enough space in a logline ?and its counterproductive, to list all the characters. ?Even in a truly ensemble story, I think a logline should try to feature the most interesting character, the one most likely to hook interest in the script.

    And what hooked my interest in your script was not the pacifist priest, nor the amateur forger, but the one-legged female spy.

    One other reason I opt for the one-legged female as the main character is that there are a number of stories of Catholic priests who came to the rescue of Jews during World War 2. ?So a Catholic priest risking his life to do the right thing, while a noble action, was not unique.

    But how many stories are there of one-legged female spies who came to the rescue of Jews? ?Again, she’s unique.. She stands out from crowd.

    fwiw and best wishes with your script

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  2. Posted: January 21, 2017In: SciFi

    When an alien experiment crash lands in his backyard and gives him strange powers, a subdued teenager must use his new abilities and protect himself from malicious space hunters.

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    Added an answer on January 21, 2017 at 10:32 am

    Yes, what's at stake?And how can he have acquired ?"strange new powers" but be "subdued"?The concept needs clarification.

    Yes, what’s at stake?

    And how can he have acquired ?”strange new powers” but be “subdued”?

    The concept needs clarification.

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  3. Posted: January 21, 2017In: Romance

    A socially withdrawn girl creates a fantasy world while riding on the bus and falls in love with the boy who sits across from her, but he takes her places in her head she doesn?t want to face.

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    Added an answer on January 21, 2017 at 10:28 am

    As CraigDGriffigths said. "Doesn't want to face" -- what does that mean? ?The logline needs to clarify the dramatic problem and what she must do about it -- what becomes her objective goal.

    As CraigDGriffigths said. “Doesn’t want to face” — what does that mean? ?The logline needs to clarify the dramatic problem and what she must do about it — what becomes her objective goal.

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