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  1. Posted: January 21, 2017In: War

    A French village and pacifist priest must work with a bloodthirsty resistance group to fight invading Nazi’s and save 5000 Jews from extermination using only their Protestant values, an amateur forger and a one-legged female spy. *True Holocaust Story*

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    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on January 21, 2017 at 10:17 am

    The story is interesting, but even though it has a diverse ensemble cast, I think it would be better to frame the struggle around one central character as the protagonist. ?And to identify where the story takes place. ?So either, something like:The true story of how a pacifist [French, Polish, ItaliRead more

    The story is interesting, but even though it has a diverse ensemble cast, I think it would be better to frame the struggle around one central character as the protagonist. ?And to identify where the story takes place. ?So either, something like:

    The true story of how a pacifist [French, Polish, Italian or???] priest risked his life to save 5,000 Jews from the Nazi death camps by rallying the support of a violent resistance group, an amateur forger and a one-legged female spy.

    Or better:
    The true story of how a one-legged female spy helped to ?save 5,000 Jews from Nazi death camps.

    Better because the one-legged spy ?is by far the strongest hook. ?You could but I don’t think you would have to name her nationality because more important is the fact that she was one-legged. ??And the logline is short and to the point. ?

    Dare I say it fulfills the definition of a ‘ high concept’ story: 1] A unique character 2] whose objective goal can be stated in fewer than 20 words, and in the age of the internet 3] it can be stated as a tweet with characters to spare. ?A three-fer.?

    And that is why the concept gets my vote.

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  2. Posted: January 19, 2017In: Romance

    When an agoraphobic online student meets his soulmate, he gets a job at a bar to face his fear in public, only to find out that his love is a pop star.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on January 20, 2017 at 2:30 pm

    What is it that you really, really want to explore in the story? ?Agoraphobia? ?Or is agoraphobia intended as a dramatic device to complicate the romantic relationship?

    What is it that you really, really want to explore in the story? ?Agoraphobia? ?Or is agoraphobia intended as a dramatic device to complicate the romantic relationship?

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  3. Posted: January 19, 2017In: Drama

    Your body is the asset, Social class is the Pyramid Scheme. California is the Guinea Pig & Chance is the Prodigal Son.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on January 19, 2017 at 7:39 am

    Uh, ?no it ?isn't self-explanatory. (Otherwise, I wouldn't have asked.)The logline (vaguely) defines a situation for a plot. ?But it doesn't clearly state what the plot is.(And if "Chance" is the name of the flesh and blood protagonist, loglines, as a rule, describe the main character by that personRead more

    Uh, ?no it ?isn’t self-explanatory. (Otherwise, I wouldn’t have asked.)

    The logline (vaguely) defines a situation for a plot. ?But it doesn’t clearly state what the plot is.

    (And if “Chance” is the name of the flesh and blood protagonist, loglines, as a rule, describe the main character by that person’s defining characteristic, not a name or surname.)

    Again, please review the guidelines under “Formula”.

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