1. Posted: December 31, 2013In:

    A former Marines first day at Walmart is turned upside down when eco-terrorist capture the store and take his sister hostage.

    EdgeWriter Penpusher

    I like how this logline has been worked - a former marine with PTSD who has to go back into action - great internal conflict, good stuff.

    I like how this logline has been worked – a former marine with PTSD who has to go back into action – great internal conflict, good stuff.

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  2. Posted: January 3, 2014In:

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    Thanks dpg. The protagonist's journey is obviously my main interest, too. First draft's done, but I have a lot of rewriting to do ;-)

    Thanks dpg. The protagonist’s journey is obviously my main interest, too. First draft’s done, but I have a lot of rewriting to do 😉

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  3. Posted: November 14, 2013In:

    A mother and daughter find themselves stranded in the middle of the night on an abandoned road. Deep in the surrounding woods a nightmarish terror stalks them, and they must find the courage to face the beast or be destroyed by it.

    EdgeWriter Penpusher

    A logline has to be active and tell us about the story, so who is the main character, what is their problem, and what do they have to do to solve that problem? After being stranded on an abandoned road in the middle of the night, an estranged mother must save her daughter when an ancient evil with aRead more

    A logline has to be active and tell us about the story, so who is the main character, what is their problem, and what do they have to do to solve that problem?

    After being stranded on an abandoned road in the middle of the night, an estranged mother must save her daughter when an ancient evil with a taste for virgins stalks them through the surrounding woodlands.?

    Still flabby, but it gives you a better sense of who the protagonist is and what her internal and external goals are, and what?s at stake for her.

    Hope this helps.

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