1. Posted: December 3, 2016In:

    PALEO When her boss at a wild game restaurant turns into a Neanderthal, a vegetarian waitress must solve the puzzle of evolution to escape with her life.

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    This is a good concept in my opinion. It's not clear why the waitress should help his boss (can't she just run away?) - anyway I think there are many ways to upgrade this logline, it just needs some work. Good job! And good luck!

    This is a good concept in my opinion. It’s not clear why the waitress should help his boss (can’t she just run away?) – anyway I think there are many ways to upgrade this logline, it just needs some work. Good job! And good luck!

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  2. Posted: December 2, 2016In:

    When the public ignores evidence of violent rape by a demagogic president, a reporter convinces MIT nanobot engineers to help her surveil him, certain that airing his private moments will destroy him, but also naive to the many dangers of the plan.

    FFF Mentor

    The idea is interesting but I think the movie is 'outside' the logline. I mean, the real movie is about what happens after the reporter starts the?surveillance and the logline should capture that rahter than 'convincing the mit scientists of blah blah blah'.

    The idea is interesting but I think the movie is ‘outside’ the logline. I mean, the real movie is about what happens after the reporter starts the?surveillance and the logline should capture that rahter than ‘convincing the mit scientists of blah blah blah’.

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  3. Posted: December 4, 2016In:

    When an Iraq War vet loses both his house and wife, he resolves to use his training to take out the CEO of a major NYC investment bank whom he blames for his losses and whose security detail is mostly composed of other vets.

    FFF Mentor

    Hello, I keep an eye on this website and so I read many many loglines. I must say this one is faaaaaar better than the average! I think it could be improuved on the level of the words (too many words, not very elegant in style). Anyway, I can see a movie here!

    Hello,
    I keep an eye on this website and so I read many many loglines. I must say this one is faaaaaar better than the average! I think it could be improuved on the level of the words (too many words, not very elegant in style). Anyway, I can see a movie here!

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