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A corrupt detective with one month left to live tries to make all the wrongs right in a wobbly road to redemption, becoming the cop ? and the person ? he always wanted to be in the process.
True, interesting! In fact, I think he intentionally wrote?a logline as open as possible because it was meant to be?a blueprint - ?for a writer contest where writers must submit 15 pages based on this 'logline'. I think he would have written a completely different logline if it was meant to describeRead more
True, interesting!
In fact, I think he intentionally wrote?a logline as open as possible because it was meant to be?a blueprint – ?for a writer contest where writers must submit 15 pages based on this ‘logline’.
I think he would have written a completely different logline if it was meant to describe his own script, and if it was not a ‘name’ in the industry.
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Hello, to me it sounds too confusing, maybe you can avoid some details to tell the sory in a more linear way?
Hello,
to me it sounds too confusing,
maybe you can avoid some details to tell the sory in a more linear way?
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Hello, I don't know the movie you referes to "Grosse Pointe Blank", but I think that the concept is interesting (my favourite of your submissions). I recomment to avoid "with troubled pasts" for 2 reasons. 1) It's implied by the word "neurotic". ?2) It's the kind of expression everyone?use when theyRead more
Hello, I don’t know the movie you referes to “Grosse Pointe Blank”, but I think that the concept is interesting (my favourite of your submissions).
I recomment to avoid “with troubled pasts” for 2 reasons. 1) It’s implied by the word “neurotic”. ?2) It’s the kind of expression everyone?use when they don’t know exactly what happened; it doesn’t build curiosity: make the reader curious by what you tell, or don’t tell.
I wonder if you really need to add something to this logline, which I found elegant.
The goal and the stakes are clear (kill and avoid to be killed).
Maybe I would even avoid to mention the “highly secretive client” (which is a little vague).
“Three neurotic hit-men are separately enlisted to assassinate each other”.
If you want to go further to use a logline to spot and prevent story problems, you could start with “when?three neurotic hit-men?are separately enlisted to assassinate each other” then what happens ? .
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