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After a werewolf saughters the family of a pregnant newlywed and she loses her child, she becomes a cold-hearted hunter and uncovers it’s her best friend.
Hello, I can't understand what is the main idea of the movie. If it's just a revenge movie I think it's not original enough. An unbord child is mentioned, it seems to me an useless detail (a slaughtered family is enough, no need to add the details about all the members of the family - unless the unbRead more
Hello,
I can’t understand what is the main idea of the movie. If it’s just a revenge movie I think it’s not original enough.
An unbord child is mentioned, it seems to me an useless detail (a slaughtered family is enough, no need to add the details about all the members of the family – unless the unborn child have some peculiar interest in the story, which should be clear if it is the case).
The thing that seems more promising?is the fact that the murderer is her best friend, so I would start to build from this – and push it harder.
“When a pregnant?newlywed discover that her husband is the werewolf who slaughtered her family, she…”
Tell me what happens and this is a movie I woul like to see!
What I’m trying to say is that in horror you have to come up with at least one original detail to succed.
Anyway, if the fact that the werewolf is her best friend is “just” a final reveal, it’s a 5 seconds scene and it shouldn’t be mentioned in the logline.
Watch “dog soldiers”, an excellent movie about werewolfs.
See lessDying single father on the run from his criminal past pursues misguided romance with a wealthy heiress to procure a new suitable home for his young son with special needs, but gets swept into her troubled word and confronts commiting murder in the place of someone she loves.
Focus on a specific inciting event, a main character, his goal, his opponent. Avoid useless teasing like " *committing murder* in the place of *someone she loves* ? " - in a good logline you tell things or do not tell things, and let the curiosity arise from what you tell (or you tell not). If I askRead more
Focus on a specific inciting event, a main character, his goal, his opponent.
Avoid useless teasing like ” *committing murder* in the place of *someone she loves* ? ” – in a good logline you tell things or do not tell things, and let the curiosity arise from what you tell (or you tell not). If I ask you right know who is killed and why, can you answer? If not, this sentence is a kind of blueprint for what you’re supposed to know before writing the logline.
See lessAt the turn of the 20th century, after an affair with a young Catholic Nun, a priest is enveloped in her kidnap and public fight against his Church, until finally, he renounces his faith to be with her on her deathbed.
Hello, usually you don't need to spoil the end of your movie. You should give a better descritpion of you main character (a priest is too vague). And the opponent is vague too... "the church"... I would pick a bishop, and put a good chosen adjective to characterize him. (You start with a?personal coRead more
Hello,
usually you don’t need to spoil the end of your movie.
You should give a better descritpion of you main character (a priest is too vague).
And the opponent is vague too… “the church”… I would pick a bishop, and put a good chosen adjective to characterize him. (You start with a?personal conflict and slowly you build a more vast fight against the institution).
I wonder if the time detail (the turn of the 20th century) is really significant: I think the story can work in any time, even today. Maybe you could pick a specific moment in history where the context is clearly the more appropriate to stress the power of the story.
Try to better specify the inciting event (“after an affair” is vague… is it after the end o the relation, or, probably, when the bishop?discovers his affair?).
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