1. Posted: September 5, 2012In:

    A violent gangster turns vigilante when his young son is murdered, but when he executes an undercover cop, his operation backfires.

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    How about: Years after his son?s murder, the leader of a vigilante gang trains a new recruit to take over his 'work', but the young AWOL commando is on a mission of his own.

    How about:

    Years after his son?s murder, the leader of a vigilante gang trains a new recruit to take over his ‘work’, but the young AWOL commando is on a mission of his own.

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  2. Posted: September 5, 2012In:

    A nurse helps two vampires rob a mobile blood bank.

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    This is hilarious. Does it go wrong ? What happens?

    This is hilarious. Does it go wrong ? What happens?

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  3. Posted: September 5, 2012In:

    A violent gangster turns vigilante when his young son is murdered, but when he executes an undercover cop, his operation backfires.

    Filmstar Penpusher

    Thanks. I'm two years into this story after 1st draft coverage and one on one consultation for 3 months. Getting back to the logline is extremely helpful. Thanks for all your input. Back to the logline then. I think I'll sleep on all these notes :)

    Thanks. I’m two years into this story after 1st draft coverage and one on one consultation for 3 months. Getting back to the logline is extremely helpful. Thanks for all your input. Back to the logline then.

    I think I’ll sleep on all these notes 🙂

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