1. Posted: February 15, 2018In:

    When a black high school football star mysteriously disappears, his four daring friends and their dog set out to find him, unraveling the dark secrets of their small town and a possible serial killer among the town?s elite.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Agree with Richiev. also, what does the color of the maguffin have to do with the story as well, if only to play on racial tensions? That's getting old as well.

    Agree with Richiev. also, what does the color of the maguffin have to do with the story as well, if only to play on racial tensions? That’s getting old as well.

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  2. Posted: February 15, 2018In:

    As his best friend – an alcoholic old Hollywood star – begs for death, a young reporter sees his own fate and takes a dramatic step to rewrite the story of his life.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Gotta rethink this a bit. Young people don't usually keep old people as their best friends. You go from begging for death, to another persons own struggles. This is odd, almost 2 stories as written. Try to join them somehow where it's easy to understand.

    Gotta rethink this a bit.

    Young people don’t usually keep old people as their best friends.

    You go from begging for death, to another persons own struggles. This is odd, almost 2 stories as written. Try to join them somehow where it’s easy to understand.

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  3. Posted: February 14, 2018In:

    When he meets a cyborg who comes from an earth invaded by alien body snatchers, a hardened sheriff must save his family and stop the body snatchers before their invasion of earth.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    The sheriff will always want to protect his family, if he he knows the truth or not. This sounds a lot like the terminator story. And you really need a new wrinkle on that to be successful. What else you got that's unique about your version?

    The sheriff will always want to protect his family, if he he knows the truth or not.

    This sounds a lot like the terminator story. And you really need a new wrinkle on that to be successful.

    What else you got that’s unique about your version?

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