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When a jilted bachelorette seeking revenge accidentally hits a pedestrian, she refuses to forget her schemes, despite the fact the pedestrian is actually herself
Something seems to be implied in this logline that is missing. "When a woman hits herself in an auto accident" implies a hook of some kind but it is unclear and missing context, which leads to confusion. Plus an MC "seeking revenge" is harder to root for, in general, than an MC seeking a clearing stRead more
Something seems to be implied in this logline that is missing. “When a woman hits herself in an auto accident” implies a hook of some kind but it is unclear and missing context, which leads to confusion.
Plus an MC “seeking revenge” is harder to root for, in general, than an MC seeking a clearing stated goal.
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Good points about the two-headed logline. A suggestion that has helped me: backstory is the breeding ground for a good character flaw. Consider splitting out one the inciting incidents as backstory (probably the disinherited part). Boil it down to a concise character flaw that will make the main actRead more
Good points about the two-headed logline. A suggestion that has helped me: backstory is the breeding ground for a good character flaw.
Consider splitting out one the inciting incidents as backstory (probably the disinherited part). Boil it down to a concise character flaw that will make the main action of the story very difficult for the MC in act II, but something he must overcome it in order to achieve the goal.
See lessIn a world run by machines, a timid young woman – holding a vital secret – must regain her ability to speak before everything she loves is destroyed.
I like the brevity of the logline. But I have a few questions. What does the setting "world run by machines" have to do with story? This is not clear. Also, I assume the woman getting the the secret is the inciting incident and Act II will focus on regaining her voice. Why is that so difficult? TherRead more
I like the brevity of the logline. But I have a few questions. What does the setting “world run by machines” have to do with story? This is not clear.
Also, I assume the woman getting the the secret is the inciting incident and Act II will focus on regaining her voice. Why is that so difficult? There is a little vagueness in this logline. It seems you know the story and you’re reluctant to let the reader know what it is.
You seem to have all the elements, just not worded to make the story crystal clear.
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