1. Posted: September 8, 2019In:

    When a man sets out to destroy the family that destroyed his, he ends up falling for the ingenue daughter.

    giannisggeorgiou Samurai

    First of all, what do you mean destroy a family?? Make the parents divorce? Make them go bankrupt? What is it that they have done to him that he can do back to them?So he falls in love with the daughter. Then what? This sounds like the big event. Then, there has to be an action. Must he reverse theRead more

    First of all, what do you mean destroy a family?? Make the parents divorce? Make them go bankrupt? What is it that they have done to him that he can do back to them?

    So he falls in love with the daughter. Then what? This sounds like the big event. Then, there has to be an action. Must he reverse the revenge plan? Must he detonate the bomb?

    It sounds more like a comedy to me. Running against the clock to undo what he has set up. Perhaps it ends with forgiving them and marrying the daughter.

    When a vengeful man falls for the daughter of the family responsible for his financial demise, he must [ACTION].

    or:

    When a bitter man falls for the daughter of the family he plans to avenge, he must [ACTION].

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  2. Posted: August 27, 2019In:

    A young pyromaniac makes friends with a group of self-avowed Satanists. Things go wrong when one of her new friends tries to exploit her fire-starting tendencies for their own goal.

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    When a rehabilitated pyromaniac finds acceptance in a group of satanists with a manipulative but charismatic leader, she must prove her worth by burning down the Notre Dame."burn a church" because it's a [pyromaniac + satanists] plot. Make the church as big and important as possible. Raise the stakeRead more

    When a rehabilitated pyromaniac finds acceptance in a group of satanists with a manipulative but charismatic leader, she must prove her worth by burning down the Notre Dame.

    “burn a church” because it’s a [pyromaniac + satanists] plot. Make the church as big and important as possible. Raise the stakes.

    “prove her worth” to the cult’s leader, a mother/father figure. This will create an inner conflict and a journey. She thinks she must prove her worth to her new family, by doing as they say, but she knows it’s wrong.

    “rehabilitated” because it implies backstory, addiction, relapse, weakness, but also an effort to get better.

    “find acceptance in a new family” because it implies rejection from her own family. I always find it interesting as a backstory. In Boogie Nights, Dirk Diggler gets rejected by his mum, but he finds a new family in the porn industry.

    “manipulative” or “obsessive” because it implied that the leader considers their cause more important than the relationship with the protagonist?they will use her.

    The leader can be male or female, depending on the dynamics you want to give. She will be a mother figure or he will be a father figure?this will blend with the protagonist’s backstory wound.

    I don’t know if this is the story you want to tell, but I am totally hooked.

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  3. Posted: August 28, 2019In:

    When Raju accidentaly falls into an abandoned deep tube well, chaos ensues as all efforts to rescue him seem to fail and the only thing he has to hold on to is hope.

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    giannisggeorgiou Samurai

    "When he falls into an abandoned well breaking his leg, a teenager must rescue himself or die from exhaustion."(A movie like 148 Hours, Open Water, Gerald's Game, Gravity, and Frozen, where the protagonist is the trapped one.)Or:"When an abandoned well collapses on a young boy, a firefighter's teamRead more

    “When he falls into an abandoned well breaking his leg, a teenager must rescue himself or die from exhaustion.”

    (A movie like 148 Hours, Open Water, Gerald’s Game, Gravity, and Frozen, where the protagonist is the trapped one.)

    Or:

    “When an abandoned well collapses on a young boy, a firefighter’s team must save him before he suffocates.”

    Here, the protagonist is the rescuer.

    You can choose to show both sides and that is ok, although more challenging (dual protagonist).

    Why does “chaos ensue?” It’s often tempting to blur the story’s specifics by resorting to generic and clich? expressions. This is bad writing, first of all because it impedes our thinking. When we write the story, at one point or another we will have to come up with specific events. Thus, let’s cut to the chase:

    Why can’t they take the boy out? Has the well collapsed on top of him? Is there a flood? Decide what the big obstacle is and put it in the logline.

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