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When a now famous singer returns to his hometown after years, an old estranged friend and former band mate, now unsuccessful has to re-create an old gig of their band to get in contact with his friend again.
Agree, dig the glory days band reunion idea. I do struggle with your protag(s), appears to be a buddy show that jumps on the opportunity when their famous singer friend arrives? Please clarify that. Leaning towards: “When their now-famous singer tours through their hometown, two washed-up former banRead more
Agree, dig the glory days band reunion idea.
I do struggle with your protag(s), appears to be a buddy show that jumps on the opportunity when their famous singer friend arrives? Please clarify that.
Leaning towards:
“When their now-famous singer tours through their hometown, two washed-up former bandmates reunite the estranged members in hopes of wooing him into recreating the career-launching gig that never happened”
Take care.
See lessAfter being dumped by his longtime girlfriend, a man who believes in eternal love asks for a second chance and they are given the magical opportunity to start from the beginning with what they know today and do better.
Very cool, don’t we all wish we had this do-over chance 😉. Getting an “About Time & Click” movie vibe from this. 1. Most of these shows focus on the complications of time travel and have to come up with some unique method of how the time travel can occur which I am not seeing in your logline. ThRead more
Very cool, don’t we all wish we had this do-over chance 😉. Getting an “About Time & Click” movie vibe from this.
1. Most of these shows focus on the complications of time travel and have to come up with some unique method of how the time travel can occur which I am not seeing in your logline. This will give focus to your magical opportunity and the stakes.
2. Think about amping up your inciting incident e.g. “After being dumped by his longtime girlfriend, …” but make this your own, many loglines start like this – you get the idea. One way to keep the reader curious when constructing your logline is to have them questioning – how is he going to keep this reluctant girlfriend from saying “check, please” at any given moment?
Take care.
See lessAfter an ugly break-up, a man tries to put his life together by building a new home only to find out his virtual assistent is possessed by an vengeful spirit.
Love me some horror CucuMucu, think about the following while sharpening this logline. 1. Does this breakup involve an e.g. girlfriend, or does it have more weight like an ugly divorce? The logline will serve better with a big inciting incident. If the breakup is a minor part of the plot, one that yRead more
Love me some horror CucuMucu, think about the following while sharpening this logline.
1. Does this breakup involve an e.g. girlfriend, or does it have more weight like an ugly divorce? The logline will serve better with a big inciting incident. If the breakup is a minor part of the plot, one that you move past quickly and has little or no character reoccurrence later – you could skip right to the possession as your inciting incident.
2. OPINION: It will help to call your protag an “architect” who’s building his “dream SMART home” as an anchor for the virtual assistance + “rebuilding” metaphors.
3. Now that we’re getting closer to a strong inciting incident, focus on your protag and goal, we need to work on your antagonist. Since this is not one of those old haunted house stories you need a unique method of how this vengeful spirit possesses your virtual assistant. This can get cliché quick, be careful as we (audience) has seen it all – surprise us 😊.
4. You can also add stakes or the method of how he will overcome this vengeful spirit.
If you like, please elaborate on my above comments, whom he broke up with, and this vengeful spirit so I or the community can take a crack at this – got to be a reason why this spirit is so pissed right? 😉
Hope this helps, take care
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