Thank you Richiev, yours and Sharks input for my loglines helps me greatly to understand how it works and how to make it better 🙂

My never ending struggle (and possible for any screenwriter amateur) is how much to uncover from a story 😉 I’m starting to see how it should be done.

You’re right that the witch is not perhaps such a crucial. She launches the inciting incident and then becomes the Half-man informing us what’s going on. Perhaps her relationship with the bride – her daughter which she saved by revealing grooms true cannibalistic identity by setting him on loose – will be a B-story. And the goal changes through the story. I’m still trying the best way how to tell the story. First of coarse she wants to save the villagers. But they become such a disgusting selfish beings that I don’t know what my bride will do. The best is to let it go and let them die. But that conflicts my goal, that bride takes a journey to grow up from naive little girl into humble mature woman. When i find it i guess i have my logline 😉