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An FBI agent must stop a victim of an alien abduction – modified into superhuman seeking revenge to his creators – before he starts an intergalactic war.
It should be the abduction of the victim and violently operating him his superhuman abilities. The problem is that he don't know how to control them and he mistakenly wipes out his family (his wife and kid's brain explodes) so he seeks revenge on the Aliens. However, aliens had some plan for this guRead more
It should be the abduction of the victim and violently operating him his superhuman abilities.
The problem is that he don’t know how to control them and he mistakenly wipes out his family (his wife and kid’s brain explodes) so he seeks revenge on the Aliens.
However, aliens had some plan for this guy and as it didn’t worked out, the guy escaped, aliens have no another choice then wipe out humans 🙂
See lessWhen a Nigerian hooker working in Dubai escapes barely with her life after killing a man in self-defense, she makes a vow to wreak as much havoc as she can against the rich, corrupt and powerful in an all-out battle between the haves and have-nots.
I miss some flaw of the protagonist. How much havoc can really a Nigerian hooker cause at Dubai, where women are so restricted in all aspects of public life? Perhaps she can be a luxury prostitute and therefore she has few contacts here and there? Making a vow is a good inciting incident, but thereRead more
I miss some flaw of the protagonist. How much havoc can really a Nigerian hooker cause at Dubai, where women are so restricted in all aspects of public life? Perhaps she can be a luxury prostitute and therefore she has few contacts here and there? Making a vow is a good inciting incident, but there needs to be more, some hook. What are the stakes? Vow doesn’t give us any stakes. But murder of some high-profile man can set her tail on fire and she decides to run or fight back – or she will get killed!
See lessWhen a widow with 8 children finds $21 million dollars in black garbage bags stashed in an old barn, she decides to keep it, evading drug dealers DEA and FBI in a motor home cross-country road trip with her best friend and 10 children giving away money as she goes.
You have a protagonist, an antagonist a situation, but you don't have a GOAL. What widow wants to achieve? Giving money away its not a goal, its some stage in her life path. Perhaps she needs to redeem herself from some terrible act (a murder, a robbery or perhaps just a failure to support her dyingRead more
You have a protagonist, an antagonist a situation, but you don’t have a GOAL. What widow wants to achieve? Giving money away its not a goal, its some stage in her life path. Perhaps she needs to redeem herself from some terrible act (a murder, a robbery or perhaps just a failure to support her dying husband, or something like that) so when she finds a money, she sees a way how to redeem herself by helping others. The fact that drug dealers and FBI are in her way is good backstory through which she can find the right path. But not a goal. You need to put into that logline something like “so now she decides to.” Fact that at first she throws the money away is a first stage of her path to redemption. Then something else has to come, some realization and that will make your story complete.
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