1. Posted: September 3, 2012In:

    When a socially inept nerdy teen falls for the newest cool girl in town, he must battle her 7 evil exes before he can date her.

    Karel Segers Logliner

    I've added the inciting incident to the logline, as well as the ultimate goal "before he can date her".

    I’ve added the inciting incident to the logline, as well as the ultimate goal “before he can date her”.

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  2. Posted: September 3, 2012In:

    When a socially inept nerdy teen falls for the newest cool girl in town, he must battle her 7 evil exes before he can date her.

    Karel Segers Logliner

    Thanks Craig! I fixed that one for C-Bomb as I'd like the Classics loglines to be examples of how to do it.

    Thanks Craig! I fixed that one for C-Bomb as I’d like the Classics loglines to be examples of how to do it.

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  3. Posted: September 3, 2012In:

    When a socially inept nerdy teen falls for the newest cool girl in town, he must battle her 7 evil exes before he can date her.

    Karel Segers Logliner

    Jim - There is a career in Hollywood for you. You identified one of the main problems with Scott Pilgrim... "That sounds like a lot of the same thing." I fixed the title/logline swap.

    Jim – There is a career in Hollywood for you.

    You identified one of the main problems with Scott Pilgrim…

    “That sounds like a lot of the same thing.”

    I fixed the title/logline swap.

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