1. Posted: March 30, 2016In:

    Failed documentarian roams the New Mexico mountain hunting a story until he stumbles onto a cult of women crucifying drug dealers to purge sin. He believes he’s found the story of a lifetime if he can live to tell it. Breaking Bad meets The Lottery.

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    Find another descriptor for your MC. "Failed documentarian" could do with some tender loving care. Desperate documentarian perhaps? Lowly?

    Find another descriptor for your MC.
    “Failed documentarian” could do with some tender loving care. Desperate documentarian perhaps? Lowly?

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  2. Posted: March 30, 2016In:

    A sadistic killer lures young girls into his trap when they log on a mega church’s good samaritan app. A small town deputy must face his own dark past in order to stop the killer before he strikes again.

    Karel Segers Logliner

    You could potentially do away with "good samaritan" It's a bit of a stopper, I was wondering what that might entail when really I need to be thinking about what your story is about. perhaps "Mega-churche's app" would suffice.

    You could potentially do away with “good samaritan” It’s a bit of a stopper, I was wondering what that might entail when really I need to be thinking about what your story is about. perhaps “Mega-churche’s app” would suffice.

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  3. Posted: March 30, 2016In:

    Forced out on his own for the first time, a mentally-challenged man with impulse control problems must prove to himself he can overcome his limitations and achieve his dream of a “normal” life.

    Karel Segers Logliner

    I like it, but you either need to specify his impulse controls, or his version of a normal life - or both.

    I like it, but you either need to specify his impulse controls, or his version of a normal life – or both.

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