dpg

Thanks for your incisive comments and questions.

They remind me of the story about the producer who reads the first 10 pages of a script ans turns to the writer and says: ?I need to know more about your main character? and the writer says ?Exactly. ?Just keep reading?.

To address one question you and RichieV raise: It?s definitely the bounty hunter?s story. Her inner struggle is to resist ? under immense pressure ? the urge to kill the innocent man in order to take down the the villain and collect the bounty.

The doppelgangers do have a complete relationship/character arc. It?s the emotional storyline; it?s designed for audiences to identify with the doppelgangers.

Because the logline attempts to address the main action line of the screenplay it only hints at the depth and breadth of the actual script.

So, for example, here are some crucial story elements that can?t appear in the logline: both villain and bounty hunter possess super-powers that don?t require any CGI ? that?s a selling point, if loglines are selling tools. So, one person?s gift controls time and the other person?s gift controls space ? a nod to Einstein?s theory of Relativity.

The story is set mainly in one location but at 3 different time periods separated by 20 years ? this alone is worthy of the logline because it?s a fresh variation on the single location story ? a huge selling point.

Plus, because it?s set in one location the character relationships do get pretty intense and the story is not bloated with irrelevancies. Also, the story is a genre mashup: it has western, sci-fi, crime and action tropes all over it. So, writing a logline or a synopsis for this kind of story is a major challenge.