1. Posted: September 15, 2015In:

    A charming hired hand falls for the same idealistic young woman as his close friend, an emerging revolutionary after they are driven to the rural south by growing violence and corruption in the city. (Besides log line help, would like to know if you would watch this movie?)

    Knightrider Mentor

    Yep, I would tweak it a bit to add conflict irony or conflict. After her father dies a stuck up type must prove she's worth the inheritance by working for the help of a rival family, only ly to fall in love with the dashing prince and the dishwasher boy. The above isn't perfect, far from it, but poiRead more

    Yep, I would tweak it a bit to add conflict irony or conflict.

    After her father dies a stuck up type must prove she’s worth the inheritance by working for the help of a rival family, only ly to fall in love with the dashing prince and the dishwasher boy.

    The above isn’t perfect, far from it, but point I am making is we get a sense of the act structure, the lead character’s flaw, the conflict that will rise from love vs wealth, is she really in love with the prince or is he just a symbol of the life she thinks she wants.

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  2. Posted: July 5, 2015In:

    Mistaken as Earth’s leader, due to his popularity on social media, a washed up actor is abducted by aliens to help prove humanity is worth saving from imminent destruction.

    Knightrider Mentor

    Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated. I guess the Court Battle would be the Third Act, while the film will be about the preparation, the mistakes he could make like witness tampering, for a while he may still think he is auditioning for a role, and how his arrogance and belief he doesn't have tRead more

    Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated.

    I guess the Court Battle would be the Third Act, while the film will be about the preparation, the mistakes he could make like witness tampering, for a while he may still think he is auditioning for a role, and how his arrogance and belief he doesn’t have to confront anything as there will always be people to handle situations for him comes becomes his own obstacles as he tries numerous methods to get the case thrown out.

    Yep, I agree the Highway was a bit of an uninspired choice. So I might – hopefully – try and add an element of “Social Commentary”, which even the pros struggle to do without being preachy so I will need to be careful, but I though that perhaps a scientist is on the verge of a new technology that will propel mankind into space, but we focus on celeb gossip and reality TV and so we have our priorities wrong, but aliens are worried about this tech and must decide if we should be allowed, confined to Earth or eradicated.

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  3. Posted: June 29, 2015In:

    A dissociative identity disorder sufferer starts hunting a clandestine agency who, he believes, have artificially created his condition to hide a ruthless assassin within his own mind.

    Knightrider Mentor

    I have thought about that, still juggling with the ending somewhat... as I do think there is a great message in confronting who you really are as opposed to pretending to be someone you are not. Also it could tie into the other element of can people change their natures anyhow, perhaps his fake idenRead more

    I have thought about that, still juggling with the ending somewhat… as I do think there is a great message in confronting who you really are as opposed to pretending to be someone you are not. Also it could tie into the other element of can people change their natures anyhow, perhaps his fake identity is starting to break down due to this very concept that you can only hold in you true self for so long either confront it or watch as your very own conflicted nature destroys you and everyone around you.

    Also thought maybe a merger of the two personas could work as an ending.

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