1. Posted: March 4, 2015In:

    When a vindictive cyber-terrorist steals nuclear activation codes, a distrusting special agent must use an experimental machine to enter his mind and retrieve them before he instigates a global conflict.

    Knightrider Mentor

    Thanks again for your help. That is why I have added the 'Untrusting' element, as someone who spends his time learning the secrets and hidden lives of others is going to struggle with his own personal relationships and never have that deep connection with someone as he'll always be searching for whaRead more

    Thanks again for your help. That is why I have added the ‘Untrusting’ element, as someone who spends his time learning the secrets and hidden lives of others is going to struggle with his own personal relationships and never have that deep connection with someone as he’ll always be searching for what is under the surface. Something that perhaps with our partners we all wish we could look inside and see what is ticking, but from time to time you have to learn to trust, which is something my character will learn, and in doing so will develop a connection.

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  2. Posted: March 4, 2015In:

    When a vindictive cyber-terrorist steals nuclear activation codes, a distrusting special agent must use an experimental machine to enter his mind and retrieve them before he instigates a global conflict.

    Knightrider Mentor

    Thanks again for your help. That is why I have added the 'Untrusting' element, as someone who spends his time learning the secrets and hidden lives of others is going to struggle with his own personal relationships and never have that deep connection with someone as he'll always be searching for whaRead more

    Thanks again for your help. That is why I have added the ‘Untrusting’ element, as someone who spends his time learning the secrets and hidden lives of others is going to struggle with his own personal relationships and never have that deep connection with someone as he’ll always be searching for what is under the surface. Something that perhaps with our partners we all wish we could look inside and see what is ticking, but from time to time you have to learn to trust, which is something my character will learn, and in doing so will develop a connection.

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  3. Posted: March 4, 2015In:

    When experimental mind control technology is stolen, a cold and ruthless assassin is hired to retrieve it and kill the thief, but the more he discovers, the more he realizes he stole it.

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    Thank you for both of your comments. I will say I had originally wrote a logline, that I ended up scrapping, that started with him discovering his mind was controlled, but as I played with the story from that starting point, I just felt it was always leaning to him not knowing, and allowing for thatRead more

    Thank you for both of your comments. I will say I had originally wrote a logline, that I ended up scrapping, that started with him discovering his mind was controlled, but as I played with the story from that starting point, I just felt it was always leaning to him not knowing, and allowing for that twist when he does discover what happened, and he may have, regardless of the fact he wasn’t in control, killed his friends, partners etc.

    Yep, coming up with the how and the why is something I am working towards, was he set up to take the fall as at the start he was perfect to do so, maybe he stumbled onto a plan, or was simply hired because he was seen as weak and controllable and thus easily manipulated, these are all elements I am working on.

    However, as I say I love the feedback it is a great help.

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