1. Posted: March 5, 2015In:

    When a reckless special agent, who’s enhanced with mind control technology, is hacked and made to kill his own team, he must expose his would-be puppeteers to prove his innocence, but the closer he gets, the more he finds himself asking: Is he a puppet, and, if so, who’s pulling the strings?

    Knightrider Mentor

    Thank you. On your opinion does this version work better than the other where he is aware of what he has done from the outset, rather than being unaware?

    Thank you. On your opinion does this version work better than the other where he is aware of what he has done from the outset, rather than being unaware?

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  2. Posted: March 5, 2015In:

    When a reckless special agent, who’s enhanced with mind control technology, is hacked and made to kill his own team, he must expose his would-be puppeteers to prove his innocence, but the closer he gets, the more he finds himself asking: Is he a puppet, and, if so, who’s pulling the strings?

    Knightrider Mentor

    Thanks Dpg, however don't a lot of films suffer from this issue, James Bond or Jason Bourne's work isn't kind natured, but because they are doing it for the "Good Guys" we kinda let them off and root for them, like in Pulp Fiction John Trvolta is a mob killer, but we root for him because they made tRead more

    Thanks Dpg, however don’t a lot of films suffer from this issue, James Bond or Jason Bourne’s work isn’t kind natured, but because they are doing it for the “Good Guys” we kinda let them off and root for them, like in Pulp Fiction John Trvolta is a mob killer, but we root for him because they made the main villian worse and kinda made him funny. Point being: Is it the point of the logline or the script to make the character likeable as I thought the logline was just to hint at the flaw, which in this case is his one inexperience both as an agent, both in the real world has made him naive and thus he is manipulated in more ways than one.

    If he is an agent using this tech, I guess I would need to give him morals, someone who is doing this because he sees it as doing good and etc.

    Your other points are spot on and will look to rework the ending.

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  3. Posted: March 5, 2015In:

    When a reckless special agent, who’s enhanced with mind control technology, is hacked and made to kill his own team, he must expose his would-be puppeteers to prove his innocence, but the closer he gets, the more he finds himself asking: Is he a puppet, and, if so, who’s pulling the strings?

    Knightrider Mentor

    It does, I guess I was just trying to get across the fact that this is a person that, because he never really goes on missions as he is controlling people from a far, he has to finally do it. However, I do see your point so will trim it down

    It does, I guess I was just trying to get across the fact that this is a person that, because he never really goes on missions as he is controlling people from a far, he has to finally do it.

    However, I do see your point so will trim it down

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