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One lonely Filipino seafarer in a cruise ship finds comfort to his roommate who saves money to marry but he falls for him unexpectedly and as they sail together his feeling grows deeper until he’s force to reveal it
"Filipino seafarer" captures only the stereotype of nationality and occupation. This character is lonely. Why? If this were my logline I'd reflect more on character psychology. What might have made this character an individualist ... character being modelled of experience. Drama category? Or perhapsRead more
“Filipino seafarer” captures only the stereotype of nationality and occupation. This character is lonely. Why? If this were my logline I’d reflect more on character psychology. What might have made this character an individualist … character being modelled of experience.
Drama category? Or perhaps Romance? Ah, gender reference? Roommate equal’s girl/boy? Hard to otherwise visualise story events.
If this logline is romance, then plot structure would be two people desperate to be with each other …. but forever pulled apart. Think ‘When Harry met Sally’
See lessA young cadet surveyor of planets fights an evil force that has infiltrated the League of celestial nations for the purpose of extracting and transferring the life force of people to their own dying population.
"Young Cadet Surveyor of Planets" -> implies Naive, but doesn't state it. If this were my logline, I might reflect on a psychological depth of character ... "evil force" == stereotype. Personally I like stereotypes, as they reveal so much about our prejudice towards "Other" social groups. It's moRead more
“Young Cadet Surveyor of Planets” -> implies Naive, but doesn’t state it. If this were my logline, I might reflect on a psychological depth of character …
“evil force” == stereotype. Personally I like stereotypes, as they reveal so much about our prejudice towards “Other” social groups. It’s mostly the abstract quality of ‘evil force’ that is failing to create a mental image for me. Ditto “life force”.
See lessWhen left alone by his busy father at his office, a young child who believes his father is a professional spy must help deliver coded messages in order to win his father’s pride.
Like the contrast of 'young naivety' vs. 'secret knowledge'. It suggests the character arc might be from naivety -> through to -> wisdom. The "...win his father's pride", implies Father == Antagonist. However what's @STAKE! ? Lose of his father's pride - seeking out the approval of one's fatheRead more
Like the contrast of ‘young naivety’ vs. ‘secret knowledge’. It suggests the character arc might be from naivety -> through to -> wisdom.
The “…win his father’s pride”, implies Father == Antagonist.
However what’s @STAKE! ? Lose of his father’s pride – seeking out the approval of one’s father doesn’t always lead to happiness?
… Perhaps what’s a stake is a whole nation’s government secrets. Wonder if a statement of nationality may help create more context – but will naturally reveal political bias.
Do like how the father has been set as widow – makes it feel fairytale like (think Cinderella). This sets up the child’s archetypal lack as ‘Mother Complex’. Perhaps in the child’s setting out for approval of his father, the ‘moment of recognition’ comes as a resolving of child’s loss of mother …
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