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A divorcé redirects his self-hatred upon the very private investigator he had paid to spy on his ex after discovering their newly established relationship.
In attempt to get the word count down to 25 words I've revised this to: "After discovering a romance has begun, a self-hating divorcee reigns vendetta against the private investigator he simply had paid to spy on his ex." I replaced the descriptions of an "abusive" and/or "jealous" divorcee since thRead more
In attempt to get the word count down to 25 words I’ve revised this to:
“After discovering a romance has begun, a self-hating divorcee reigns vendetta against the private investigator he simply had paid to spy on his ex.”
I replaced the descriptions of an “abusive” and/or “jealous” divorcee since these descriptors are already implied in the logline as a whole. I’ve instead decided to tell the manner in which he is abusive, and it all stems from his self-hating nature.
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Hi Ben, This seems to roll off the tongue a lot better, thank you for your rewritten suggestion.
Hi Ben,
This seems to roll off the tongue a lot better, thank you for your rewritten suggestion.
See lessA transgender young woman has to dress up as a man to rejoin a boy band she was fired from.
Is there any reason as to why she does this? Structure: A [what] young woman [must] dress up as a male to join a boy band [because why]. Comedy loglines work best if there is a sense of irony included, so for example, "a transgender woman must dress up as a new man in order to rejoin the boy band shRead more
Is there any reason as to why she does this?
Structure: A [what] young woman [must] dress up as a male to join a boy band [because why].
Comedy loglines work best if there is a sense of irony included, so for example, “a transgender woman must dress up as a new man in order to rejoin the boy band she was fired from,” would work a bit better because the irony of one turning transgender – only to subsequently pretend to be the gender they were born as – subtly hints at the stakes of the story.
Find something that suits your character so that it can help juxtapose against the grain of your premise. Just remember that stakes are a must for loglines, whereas irony is a key to comedy.
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