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After falling in love with twin sisters, an irresolute Iranian student has to decide with whom he wants to spend his life with before getting forcibly married to an unkown woman by his family.
Making a decision is not an objective visual goal. It happens in the character's head. How is this represented on screen? "After falling in love with twin sisters" - an inciting incident should be one moment, one scene - a shark eats a tourist/he discovers a lost alien in his bike shed etc. After heRead more
Making a decision is not an objective visual goal. It happens in the character’s head. How is this represented on screen?
“After falling in love with twin sisters” – an inciting incident should be one moment, one scene – a shark eats a tourist/he discovers a lost alien in his bike shed etc. After he fell in love with the first, he suddenly falls in love with the second too? I worry that he’s coming across as someone who doesn’t really know what he wants and it’s difficult to get behind a protagonist who doesn’t have a clear objective.
I think the whole arranged marriage element is interesting. However, I’m conscious that it’s been done before – Brick Lane, The Big Sick, Arthur – so what’s different here? I agree wholeheartedly with yqwertz with this feeling like a male-fantasy, with two dimensional female characters.
Conflict wise, I agree there is some conflict to be found AFTER he’s made his decision. But, before this point, all the conflict is inside his head. What’s happening on screen?
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen a bad boy movie star agrees to a blind date, he ends up with his biggest fan – a struggling single mom, whom he falls for.
So what does he do next? At what point does he fall for the mom? End of Act I? Or midpoint? At the moment, for me, it feels as though the inciting incident is when he falls for her so that leads me to ask what he does next. I almost feel like, for the most amount of conflict, she's not a super fan aRead more
So what does he do next? At what point does he fall for the mom? End of Act I? Or midpoint? At the moment, for me, it feels as though the inciting incident is when he falls for her so that leads me to ask what he does next.
I almost feel like, for the most amount of conflict, she’s not a super fan at all, but barely knows who he is. Maybe her daughter’s a big fan and she entered her mom into the competition. I’m thinking he probably has an ego and to meet someone who doesn’t care about that at all would provide more conflict than if she was a fan. If was all about the superstar lifestyle and that didn’t even register to her because she’s a single mom, I think he’s got much much further to go.
I’m also wondering who the protagonist is. I kinda feel like she’s more interesting if you went with the idea above although it could even be a dual protagonist story. I do like the underlying idea though – like a reverse Notting Hill.
Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
See lessAfter losing the love of his life in the streets of India, a homeless teenager participates in the TV show? Who wants to be a millionaire to find her again. Film: Slumdog Millionaire (2008) (30 words)
I think you need to make it clear why going on the tv show will help find her again. Your second version hints at how his experiences relate but there's a bit of disconnect in my opinion. A homeless teenager's life in the Mumbai slums help him through the rounds of Who Wants To Be A Millionaire, butRead more
I think you need to make it clear why going on the tv show will help find her again. Your second version hints at how his experiences relate but there’s a bit of disconnect in my opinion.
A homeless teenager’s life in the Mumbai slums help him through the rounds of Who Wants To Be A Millionaire, but all he wants is TV exposure to help him find the girl he loves. ?(35 words)
It’s understanding why he wants to go on the show that’s crucial. It’s a tricky one though as it’s told through flashbacks and you don’t discover his goal until much later (I could be wrong on this, it’s been a while since I’ve watched it).
Thoughts on mine are welcome.
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