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During an alien invasion that’s happening in their town, a young couple must stick together to stop their neighbors from being abducted.
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See lessAfter his father’s death, a young man with autism discovers an experimental drug to help him cope with the murder of his classmate.
My issue with this is you're suggesting the only way a young man with Aspergers is capable of having the mental faculties to investigate a crime is to take a drug to change his brain. In the world we live in today, I don't think this is the sort of message that is wanted or needed. Instead, can I suRead more
My issue with this is you’re suggesting the only way a young man with Aspergers is capable of having the mental faculties to investigate a crime is to take a drug to change his brain. In the world we live in today, I don’t think this is the sort of message that is wanted or needed. Instead, can I suggest that BECAUSE of his Aspergers he’s the ONLY ONE capable of perceiving things in a certain way that allows him to see the murder in a different way. That’s actually the hook.
Re: protagonist – can you be more specific rather than young man. Young man could be anything from say 16 to 30? you mentioned classmates so we can assume he’s in school – but there’s a big difference between say 16 and say 21. My recommendation is to tell us how old he is. It’s important we understand that as it’s fundamental to understanding the society around this kid.
His goal isn’t to simply investigate – it’s to solve the murder.
What’s the inciting incident? It obviously relates to the murder but as this is about his Aspergers, I think it needs to be something that he alone sees that leads him to investigate.
Genre-wise – I don’t see this as a thriller. I see it as a mystery verging on noir. Thriller MUST have a ticking clock in the logline in my opinion.
I like the idea of a kid with Aspergers investigating a murder though. Have you read the book “The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night-Time”? I’d recommend it if not.
See lessA pair of young lovers from rival lobster fishing gangs in Maine must unite their communities in order to defend their territories against the encroaching Canadian lobster mafia.
I really like the sound of this and I think it's a solid logline. I'm not sure it's essential to state that it's in Maine and it's the Canadian lobster mafia, however I understand that you've probably mentioned that to introduce conflicts between two countries perhaps? Do they have to be lovers? ToRead more
I really like the sound of this and I think it’s a solid logline.
I’m not sure it’s essential to state that it’s in Maine and it’s the Canadian lobster mafia, however I understand that you’ve probably mentioned that to introduce conflicts between two countries perhaps?
Do they have to be lovers? To me, it makes no difference either way – the story is the same. I would maybe start with one protagonist who must find a way to unite his gang with a rival gang without this prior relationship. The love can blossom between these two characters but I think there is further to go and more of a story without it. Going from despising the rivals, to working together, to the lovely B-story romance works great.
Got a title? Something like Pot Shots, or Gone To Pot perhaps?
Good luck.
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