1. Posted: October 29, 2017In:

    When a 12 year old girl becomes under protection of a hitmen, she must learn the tools of the trade to avenge her parents assassinated by gangsters.

    moviefreak81 Samurai

    I thought that including the true(?) inciting incident would (murder of their parents) would make it clutter but your take doesn't look that much cluttered... good work.

    I thought that including the true(?) inciting incident would (murder of their parents) would make it clutter but your take doesn’t look that much cluttered… good work.

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  2. Posted: October 29, 2017In:

    After having her father killed, a farm girl must endure a journey with a tough US marshall to get her revenge.

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    moviefreak81 Samurai

    thanks for both long and short version LOL I was familiar with the "Meden Agan" (nothing in excess) from the greeks but not the word "sophrosyn?". Good stuff..? for the logline I think it's pretty good with "stubborn" and "tough, drunken".

    thanks for both long and short version LOL
    I was familiar with the “Meden Agan” (nothing in excess) from the greeks but not the word “sophrosyn?”.

    Good stuff..? for the logline I think it’s pretty good with “stubborn” and “tough, drunken”.

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  3. Posted: October 29, 2017In:

    After having her father killed, a farm girl must endure a journey with a tough US marshall to get her revenge.

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    moviefreak81 Samurai

    Thanks dpg, learning a lot with your inputs. Just a question here, since you are a fan of slim loglines... why do you think it is necessary 3 adjectives for the protagonist? If I had to cut one, perhaps I'd pick "revengeful". I'd assume she is since she was after her father's murderer?

    Thanks dpg, learning a lot with your inputs. Just a question here, since you are a fan of slim loglines… why do you think it is necessary 3 adjectives for the protagonist? If I had to cut one, perhaps I’d pick “revengeful”. I’d assume she is since she was after her father’s murderer?

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