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When he arrives for a year in america, a reserved french student must learn to adapt to make the most out of the experience.
That's the thing.? If you want to write a sort of memoir, or biography, that's fine, maybe you don't need a logline. If you want to write a marketeable fiction, you need conflict, clear goal, a sharp logline that states all very clearly. Have a look at the examples section. See how clear the conflicRead more
That’s the thing.? If you want to write a sort of memoir, or biography, that’s fine, maybe you don’t need a logline. If you want to write a marketeable fiction, you need conflict, clear goal, a sharp logline that states all very clearly. Have a look at the examples section. See how clear the conflict, the goal and everything are.
See lessWhen he arrives for a year in america, a reserved french student must learn to adapt to make the most out of the experience.
To add to Foxtrot25's comment, I can't see a hook there, and the stakes can be improved. For instance, "learn to adapt" could be made more specific (more specific is usually better in most cases) and "make most out of the experience" while relevant to the character, how can it be relevant to the audRead more
To add to Foxtrot25’s comment, I can’t see a hook there, and the stakes can be improved. For instance, “learn to adapt” could be made more specific (more specific is usually better in most cases) and “make most out of the experience” while relevant to the character, how can it be relevant to the audience as well? The most out of the experience could be in the end something that the audience could care about right a way? Like being opened to love, friendship… overcome some prejudice…?
See lessWhen a captured demon finally finds a way to get rid of, a magician and a ex nun have to risk their lives in order to save the kingdom from a vengeful demon.
To me, the most difficult part of the logline is to add specifics with a hook. For instance, "finds a way" is vague, but there is room to add a hook there. If the vengeful demon is the same, the reason he's been trapped also explains the vengence reason. Also the adjective seems to be reworded, as hRead more
To me, the most difficult part of the logline is to add specifics with a hook. For instance, “finds a way” is vague, but there is room to add a hook there. If the vengeful demon is the same, the reason he’s been trapped also explains the vengence reason.
See lessAlso the adjective seems to be reworded, as how thieves can be honest? Perhaps good-hearted?