“A cleptomaniac rich boy wanted for almost killing a clerk in a theft crosses life with a homeless writer when he steals and loses the novel he had finally finished.”

Kleptomaniac is spelled with a K, and they don’t generally commit armed robbery in order to steal things, which raises the question of how he almost kills someone. Also, a boy is a child – is this character a juvenile? Because that changes his stakes, and his environment, considerably.

What does it mean to cross life with someone? Merely that they encounter each other? Or is this some kind of Freaky Friday body-swapping story?

There are too many repetitions of “he” in this sentence, making it difficult to tell who exactly is doing what?especially if they’ve switched bodies, but even if they haven’t, who stole the novel, who lost it, who finished it, why specify it’s finished when saying it’s a novel already implies completion?

I’d come up with an example of a rewrite but I just don’t know what the story is here; this logline’s too confusing. Clear up these issues, try again, and we’ll see what it’s about.

“A fake psychic is haunted by real spirits as they force him to right his wrongs and just annoy the hell out of him.”

They force him to annoy the hell out of himself? Huh? And how can they force him to do anything if they’re just spirits? Do his wrongs have something to do with his being a fake, or is it something else?

The irony of the protagonist’s predicament is clear, but what’s at stake for him is not – nor is the antagonist’s motivation. And if whatever wrongs this guy has committed are serious enough for spirits to reveal themselves and accost him, he’s probably not a very sympathetic character.

If, however, the spirits need his help to accomplish something they, as spirits, are not able to, and he agrees initially just so they’ll stop annoying him, but along the way he actually starts to care about them and learns something about himself?all of that is understandable, but you’ve got to hint at it with the logline. Maybe something like:

“When a fake psychic is haunted by real spirits, he must find a way to help them move on before their antics get him locked up for good.”

That shows there’s something at stake for everybody, and it’s all tied in together. Could be a lot of fun!