I must admit that I haven’t worked out all the details of the story yet. I go the Save the Cat way and come up with a title and logline first and then work out the story.

At the moment I’m thinking a date takes him to see a Broadway, or off Broadway, show and then afterwards he gives the complaint I often hear from friends who don’t like musicals: that they can’t buy the idea of people bursting into song all the time. So, just to prove him wrong the date sends him to this other universe to prove him wrong. This may be cheesy but I was thinking that the date transports them to the alternate universe with a song and dance number in an alley. But I think it could work in the context of the story.

The accountant will try just about everything, like pleading with the person who transported him to restore everything, returning to the alley, and in as many ways as possible replicate the circumstances, while trying to avoid singing or dancing himself.

Also I’m thinking he won’t be transported back until he “learns his lesson” and breaks out of his habits, routines and inhibitions and become more spontaneous. … And then finds love in the process.

As I’ve learned it, loglines shouldn’t be over 25 words preferably.

I know mine is longer than that, and could probably use some help or suggestions on how to shorten it, while getting relavant information in there.