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When a poor man’s truck breaks down, he starts selling bagged smokes to pay the mechanical bill, and soon realizes that he has a very lucrative idea.
Agreed with DPG. Most gate-keepers/decision makers will have an 'aha' moment when they hear the goal. In other words, you're more likely to catch someone's attention with a compelling goal than with an interesting setup or character description. In this case, you've established an M.O (a poverty-strRead more
Agreed with DPG.
Most gate-keepers/decision makers will have an ‘aha’ moment when they hear the goal. In other words, you’re more likely to catch someone’s attention with a compelling goal than with an interesting setup or character description.
In this case, you’ve established an M.O (a poverty-stricken truck driver illegally selling tobacco) if you can now describe a goal for this ‘means to an end’ it will elevate his actions as dramatic and story worthy. Could it be that he is about to lose his job to a self-driving truck and at the same time must keep providing for his family? This is a big concern in the logistics industries and could make for an interesting story.
See lessWhile on vacation, a high-time thief spots a 1000 year-old birchbark canoe where he sets out a plan to do one more heist before he retires and while doing so stumbles across an asian group who will stop at nothing to protect the priceless artifact.
Short or feature, a film still needs a plot and a plot needs a goal. In a short you can use a 1, 2 or 3 act structure, the format allows you to consolidate the story into fewer sequences but the forward momentum of a plot will still drive the story regardless its structure. You imply that the goal iRead more
Short or feature, a film still needs a plot and a plot needs a goal. In a short you can use a 1, 2 or 3 act structure, the format allows you to consolidate the story into fewer sequences but the forward momentum of a plot will still drive the story regardless its structure.
You imply that the goal is to take the canoe, but it’s best to specify this and even better if you can clearly describe the motivation. Could the canoe have belonged to his ancestors and is currently being used as a humiliating tourist trap? Just a though.
See lessWhile digging a murdered girls grave, the church hired hand unearths a bible from 1500 BC and he soon come to grips that it’s the only one written that?has the 11th Commandment and Honor Thy Children and in an instant is transformed to protect all children or die trying.
Again, what DPG wrote... I'll only add that the inciting incident, in this case finding the Bible, should be made into a more significant event. If anything, it should be sent to him by a divine power - make it an event out of his own control that shakes his world up, instead of a find of his own doRead more
Again, what DPG wrote…
I’ll only add that the inciting incident, in this case finding the Bible, should be made into a more significant event. If anything, it should be sent to him by a divine power – make it an event out of his own control that shakes his world up, instead of a find of his own doing. This way, he is forced into the situation and made to have to deal with it.