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A family counselor must conceal her alcoholic secret from her friends and clients over her marriage turning soar.
Best to define when the story starts, for example: After her marriage breaks down, an alcoholic marriage councillor must conceal her divorce from her clients in order to keep her practice.As mentioned the stakes seem a little low, what if she was trying to hide the divorce from her kids in order toRead more
Best to define when the story starts, for example:
After her marriage breaks down, an alcoholic marriage councillor must conceal her divorce from her clients in order to keep her practice.
As mentioned the stakes seem a little low, what if she was trying to hide the divorce from her kids in order to prevent any emotional trauma? This way the stakes characters are personal and not just business.
See lessSeven art students, all of different talents, find themselves trapped in a museum where they rewrite love, beauty and their own humanity before the groups survival overshadows their bohemian lives.
It's best to post new drafts of the same logline on the original thread, that way you can track changes and see which notes have already been given. About the logline, the concept is vague as there is no clear main characters, goals or stakes. There are also many confusing?descriptions such as: "...Read more
It’s best to post new drafts of the same logline on the original thread, that way you can track changes and see which notes have already been given.
About the logline, the concept is vague as there is no clear main characters, goals or stakes. There are also many confusing?descriptions such as: “…rewrite love, beauty and their own humanity?” – what does that mean in practical terms? What will that look like?
Best to focus your story on one character, sure you could have many characters in the story, but for the logline best to structure a coherent plot around?one character with one goal.
See lessSeven art students, attempting to survive in a luxurious art museum while humanity ends, find that life continues in astonishing ways.
A good reference would be This is the End, but in that particular instance it had an ensemble cast of top comedy actors playing themselves - that on it's own is funny. Not sure how a bunch of new characters would be able to pull off a similar effect. And as noted above, best to specify a single goalRead more
A good reference would be This is the End, but in that particular instance it had an ensemble cast of top comedy actors playing themselves – that on it’s own is funny. Not sure how a bunch of new characters would be able to pull off a similar effect.
And as noted above, best to specify a single goal for a single protagonist.
Perhaps it could be the curator trying to use his or her pragmatism to snap a bunch of airy head artists into shape in order to survive, this way the obstacle and goal are clear. Only thing you would need tough is to add some stakes, what will happen if they don’t do what they do in specific terms? Will they get eaten by Zombies or burn up in lava what ever it is it needs to be specified.
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