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When an alien satellite causes all of Earth’s transmissions suddenly stop, a retired physicist must find a way to bring them back.
Understood, logically at some point other people on Earth either hear signal as well or become aware of the aliens. If they don't then the main character could just be going mad, only then it'll have the cliche moment when the audience are told - 'it was all in his head' which could be a weak twist.Read more
Understood, logically at some point other people on Earth either hear signal as well or become aware of the aliens. If they don’t then the main character could just be going mad, only then it’ll have the cliche moment when the audience are told – ‘it was all in his head’ which could be a weak twist.
I suggest you add a hint of irony to the mystery.
What if the physicist is also, unbeknown to him, part alien, and therefore is the only person on Earth that can understand the alien language. He is then perfectly qualified for being the only man on Earth who can stop them and the whole situation becomes imbued with mystery due to his strange connection with?the aliens.
See lessWhen an alien satellite causes all of Earth’s transmissions suddenly stop, a retired physicist must find a way to bring them back.
I think it could help to include personal stakes rather than just professional ones, other wise best to change it so that for some reason this retired physicist is the only one who can bring them all back.
I think it could help to include personal stakes rather than just professional ones, other wise best to change it so that for some reason this retired physicist is the only one who can bring them all back.
See lessAn interstellar hitman is forced together with an intrepid, young archeologist in a race against a ruthless mercenary group to find the legendary fortune of an ancient civilization.
As mentioned above there are lots of problems with this logline, so I'll try to tackle a few key points. The MC sounds passive as he is forced to join with someone else and forced on a journey, better if he is powerfully motivated to need the his ally and need to go on the journey on his own accordRead more
As mentioned above there are lots of problems with this logline, so I’ll try to tackle a few key points.
The MC sounds passive as he is forced to join with someone else and forced on a journey, better if he is powerfully motivated to need the his ally and need to go on the journey on his own accord instead.
There is no inciting incident in the logline, what was the event that motivated him to go after the fortune?
If his goal is to find the fortune, why are a group of mercenaries going to get in his way? Perhaps a rival treasure hunter would make more sense.
Consider Raiders of the Lost Ark, Indiana had a rival archeologist searching for the ark who teamed up with the Nazi’s. This plot devise was a great way to introduce a huge obstacle for Indiana, the obstacle makes sense as the Nazi’s want the same as the archeologist do only for different reasons.
See lessWhat is the equivalent in your story that makes the mercenaries need to find the fortune?