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  1. Posted: April 13, 2016In: Drama

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    Added an answer on April 14, 2016 at 3:42 pm

    "...So I?m just going to write?scripts that connects to the essence of my being regardless of if it market potential." "...if I wrote 20 or 10 scripts in my lifetime that connects to me and only 1 gets made, I?d have that...." Considering your statements above posting on this website seems purely acRead more

    “…So I?m just going to write?scripts that connects to the essence of my being regardless of if it market potential.”
    “…if I wrote 20 or 10 scripts in my lifetime that connects to me and only 1 gets made, I?d have that….”

    Considering your statements above posting on this website seems purely academic, so moving forward all I can do is hope you find your writing gratifying.

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  2. Posted: April 13, 2016In: Drama

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    Added an answer on April 13, 2016 at 5:37 pm

    There is some potential in this concept for a few emotional scenes, but I can't see it holding up over the course of a full length feature. The stakes are too low and the obstacle too obscure. Technically speaking the MC's goal is to win the singing contest, but the event that motivated him to win iRead more

    There is some potential in this concept for a few emotional scenes, but I can’t see it holding up over the course of a full length feature.

    The stakes are too low and the obstacle too obscure.

    Technically speaking the MC’s goal is to win the singing contest, but the event that motivated him to win it is his wife asking him to do so. Failure, a highly likely outcome considering the nature of such reality TV shows, means disappointing his wife that makes her the stakes character. He stuck with her for years through her sickness and did try to win the show, which means she can’t say he doesn’t love her or isn’t willing to go to great lengths to please her. If she were to say he hadn’t done enough for her, it would make her nasty, self centered and inconsiderate.

    Disappointing someone who loves him and appreciates him for his efforts will result in a none event, yet if she is a nasty person disappointing her is really no big deal (if not welcome) and therefore the stakes are low in the concept as a whole.

    Further more if indeed he is or was a singer, he has all the necessary tools and skills to win the contest. However if he had never tried singing professionally then his challenge is that much more great, and if he were to win or place in the finals, his triumph more significant.

    As mentioned above, unless it’s his bucket list and there are other obstacles for him, I don’t believe this is a strong enough concept for a feature.

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  3. Posted: April 9, 2016In: Comedy

    When an entire town gets a virus from the trial of a brain-activated smart phone, a self-righteous hippy must stop the company and shut down the trial.

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    Added an answer on April 11, 2016 at 5:44 pm

    Agreed with DPG. In addition though, how is this story personal for the MC? Why is it so important for him to save the town? Is it his or her home town? Do his or her family? live there and they're trying to help them? Without making it personal the stakes seem very low.

    Agreed with DPG.

    In addition though, how is this story personal for the MC? Why is it so important for him to save the town? Is it his or her home town? Do his or her family? live there and they’re trying to help them?

    Without making it personal the stakes seem very low.

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