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When an injured photographer believes he?s witnessed a murder, he must overcome his limited mobility and cooperate with his girlfriend to bring the killer to justice.
I think describing the nature of his limited mobility would benefit the logline. Otherwise it's just another murder mystery, but what could make this interesting is the handicap the main character is forced to overcome in order to bring the killer to justice.The greater the handicap the greater theRead more
I think describing the nature of his limited mobility would benefit the logline. Otherwise it’s just another murder mystery, but what could make this interesting is the handicap the main character is forced to overcome in order to bring the killer to justice.
The greater the handicap the greater the challenge and the greater the challenge the more interesting the story.
After a [challenging mobility] photographer witnesses a murder he must enlist his girlfriend’s help to bring the killer to justice.
On a side note, you could make it a comedy and make him need to enlist his mother’s help or better yet his grandmother’s help.
See lessIn a futuristic Utopian city, built up in the sky, no form of institution like religion, nationality, marriage exists. It is strictly illegal for any couple to stay together for more than 3 months. A young couple almost end of their 3 months tenure found it impossible to part away and decided to flee down back to the old earth, a place only existed in their history books and which nobody has traveled from the city for last two centuries.
Yes these details should, nay MUST, be in the logline. The main characters need a strong inciting incident to motivate them to pursue a clear goal. Secondly, if indeed there will be a revolution will the couple lead it together? This would be a good and ambitious goal for them to pursue it also giveRead more
Yes these details should, nay MUST, be in the logline.
The main characters need a strong inciting incident to motivate them to pursue a clear goal.
Secondly, if indeed there will be a revolution will the couple lead it together? This would be a good and ambitious goal for them to pursue it also gives them a a nobler cause to fight for the greater good than there own self interest.
See lessIn a futuristic Utopian city, built up in the sky, no form of institution like religion, nationality, marriage exists. It is strictly illegal for any couple to stay together for more than 3 months. A young couple almost end of their 3 months tenure found it impossible to part away and decided to flee down back to the old earth, a place only existed in their history books and which nobody has traveled from the city for last two centuries.
Agreed with Andrew.Also presuming that the couple knew of the three month limit it is no news to them that they must part, therefore I don't believe you currently have an inciting incident. In addition, the goal of escaping the city is not specific enough. Would they not be hunted down after their eRead more
Agreed with Andrew.
Also presuming that the couple knew of the three month limit it is no news to them that they must part, therefore I don’t believe you currently have an inciting incident. In addition, the goal of escaping the city is not specific enough. Would they not be hunted down after their escape?
See lessAs such the plot is a bit vague, best to specify their sudden motivation to defy society rules as well as a clear safe heaven for them to escape to.