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After learning his mother is dying due to lack of healthcare coverage and money, a promising med student abruptly quits school to compete in a dangerous TV show offering $1 million to the lone survivor who is still alive at the end of the game.
The economy of your words will not only help sell the concept but you as a writer as well - at 45 words this logline is way too long. I take it you didn't study the 'Formula' tab on the top bar, best you do.Here is a shorter version of the same logline: After his mother is diagnosed with cancer, a pRead more
The economy of your words will not only help sell the concept but you as a writer as well – at 45 words this logline is way too long. I take it you didn’t study the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar, best you do.
Here is a shorter version of the same logline:
After his mother is diagnosed with cancer, a promising med student must compete in a reality show for one million dollars to pay for her chemo.
27 words.
See lessA grieving psychiatrist struggles to find the truth in a foul-mouthed drunk’s claims he’s Cupid when faced with deeper truths about himself, his past, and the chance of love again.
What is the psychiatrist's main goal? And what are the stakes? If it's to find out whether or not his patient is the cupid, you'd need to establish how that impacts the MC. What's the best that would happen should he succeed and what's the worst thing that would happen should he fail? It reads as thRead more
What is the psychiatrist’s main goal? And what are the stakes? If it’s to find out whether or not his patient is the cupid, you’d need to establish how that impacts the MC. What’s the best that would happen should he succeed and what’s the worst thing that would happen should he fail? It reads as though the stakes are very low.
The second half of the logline – deeper truths, to love again… seems unrelated to the plot. You can cut that out altogether and free up some valuable logline real estate for more plot critical descriptions.
A good example you could study is K-PAX. A psychiatrist must prove to his patient that he isn’t an alien – or is he…
See lessA Rebellious Saharan Princess, escapes the palace to search for her abducted mother, but discovers she is the key to the survival or enslavement of the world.
Agreed with the others. I'll add that her 'special gift' and the stakes need clarification. Are they on the verge of war? Are they about to be invaded by a powerful army? What can she do to stop it? Can she control time? Control minds? is she a witch? What makes her the only one able to stop the warRead more
Agreed with the others.
I’ll add that her ‘special gift’ and the stakes need clarification. Are they on the verge of war? Are they about to be invaded by a powerful army? What can she do to stop it? Can she control time? Control minds? is she a witch? What makes her the only one able to stop the war?
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