Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar to learn more about logline conventions. For starters, no need to mention the main character’s name, just describe him and his major flaw – and if you’re wondering, autistic isn’t a flaw, it’s a condition. A character flaw is an aspect of a character’s personality or a habit that negatively impacts their life and at the same time is something they are able to overcome.

As for the story the plot is unclear, he finds the book and helps the couch but what is his goal? To make the team win the big game? If so, how will the viewing audience know that he was responsible for the win? No amount of strategy will ever compete with sporting talent – it would be the players that win not Spike.

Secondly, a good goal needs a good inciting incident. What single, out of the ordinary event that was initiated by an external force, motivated him to take action? Him finding the book doesn’t cut it, he found it and it wasn’t world changing by any means. Best to come up with something else that a character or organization does which forces him to take action.

This segues into the last problem with this concept – the stakes. What is at stake here should the team lose? What does the main character stand to gain should they win? The most I can glean from the logline is he may stand to lose his new found sense of confidence – no big deal really. Sure, for a socially awkward person such as him, confidence is a good thing, but certainly not story worthy. Is there a bigger stake you could give him like a college scholarship or big team job offer instead.