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Being held responsible for the death of the tiger she took care of, a scared single mother has one chance to save her job as a zookeeper: to tame an untamable tiger.
Hi Leomoemba, It seems as if all the comments that were given to your previous version still apply. Check out the comments the members have already given you. In short, the inciting incident needs to be specified - the tiger's death. Also, the stakes need to be higher than just keep the job. Ask youRead more
Hi Leomoemba,
It seems as if all the comments that were given to your previous version still apply. Check out the comments the members have already given you.
In short, the inciting incident needs to be specified – the tiger’s death. Also, the stakes need to be higher than just keep the job. Ask your self, what’s the worst that would happen should she get fired? She’ll find another job – that’s not so bad. For this particular dramatic need to have an effect on the audience, you’ll need to evoke some very high stakes or else you have no ‘hook’ for a decision maker.
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Hey Paul, The latest version of the logline still suffers from the same problems as the previous. Check out all the good comments you got and see how you can adjust the concept and logline accordingly.
Hey Paul,
The latest version of the logline still suffers from the same problems as the previous.
See lessCheck out all the good comments you got and see how you can adjust the concept and logline accordingly.
A mysterious rose causes a tragedy to a teenager?s girlfriend when he gives it to her, and years later tries to make amends by helping find his perfect match. ‘UnMatched Spec script.’
The sentence doesn't make much sense, and as DPG pointed out, the premise is confusing. After your explanation, it sounds like this is a work written in prose - short story, book, or novella. It needs to be adapted to screen if it's to work in a logline. Whom, of the couple, is the main character inRead more
The sentence doesn’t make much sense, and as DPG pointed out, the premise is confusing.
After your explanation, it sounds like this is a work written in prose – short story, book, or novella. It needs to be adapted to screen if it’s to work in a logline. Whom, of the couple, is the main character in the story? The teenage boy or girlfriend?
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