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A 45 year old homemaker finds herself on the verge of an ugly divorce. With her estranged relationships and a broken heart, she tumbles further down when is left bereft of an alimony. To leave behind rock bottom, she must discover herself and start a new life.
I hate to directly disagree with someone in a thread but I find Foxtrot25's comments, which are often good advice, in this instance posing a risk of misleading a writer. This is not a lits of plot points, rather a vague description of generic situations. There are no specific events, actions or objeRead more
I hate to directly disagree with someone in a thread but I find Foxtrot25’s comments, which are often good advice, in this instance posing a risk of misleading a writer.
This is not a lits of plot points, rather a vague description of generic situations. There are no specific events, actions or objectives described all of which are necessary for a plot and plot points.
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Please consult the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar.
Avoid vague descriptions such as “…she tumbles further down…” the reason being that this can mean any number of things – she becomes addicted to drugs, self harm, alienates freinds and family, becomes a criminal. The way in which she tumbles further down can dictate the tone and even genre, therefore the details of what she does are vital for the logline.
Focus your next drafts on the details of the plot instead of allegory and simile.
See lessA color blind pianist makes it rain every time he plays his symphonies. One melody at a time, he fills colors in the lives of people who listen to him play. On his last show, he mistakenly opens the door to his painful past. If the show must go on, he has to face his demons and let the light prevail.
I can't make heads or tails of this. Are these descriptions metaphors "...makes it rain..." i.e the audience cries? Or does his music literally cause rainfall? What is his goal? What motivates him to achieve the goal? Again, I urge you to check out the 'Formula' tab on the top bar for more details oRead more
I can’t make heads or tails of this.
Are these descriptions metaphors “…makes it rain…” i.e the audience cries? Or does his music literally cause rainfall?
What is his goal?
What motivates him to achieve the goal?
Again, I urge you to check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar for more details on how to structure a logline.
On rule of thumb in loglines is; Clarity over all.
Concept and structure aside, you need to clearly communicate the elements of a story no matter what.
See lessA hometown bound 60 year old veteran is forced to reunite with his family across stranger seas. Right when he is about to leave behind his home, he finds companionship in his 30 year old neighbor. But when the inevitable D day arrives, he must lose one family to gain another.
Agreed with the above, study the guidelines in the 'Formula' tab on the top bar and re draft it. A few good starting points: What is the MC's character flaw? What specifically MUST the MC achieve? What motivates the MC to achieve his goal?
Agreed with the above, study the guidelines in the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar and re draft it.
A few good starting points:
What is the MC’s character flaw?
What specifically MUST the MC achieve?
What motivates the MC to achieve his goal?
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