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The hunter becomes the hunted when a woman lures her abusive husband into a death trap. (Short Script, 7pages)
You can implement a full three-act structure in seven pages - the length is irrelevant. The inciting incident, of all plot points, should not be hinted at rather clearly described. If the husband beat her prior to her trapping him, you would need to show her being beaten by him in order to maximiseRead more
You can implement a full three-act structure in seven pages – the length is irrelevant. The inciting incident, of all plot points, should not be hinted at rather clearly described.
If the husband beat her prior to her trapping him, you would need to show her being beaten by him in order to maximise the dramatic need and help with audience empathy. You can have a single shot scene written in the beginning of the film of her being beaten, this can happen several days or even weeks in linear time before her taking her action as it is part of the single plot.
For example:
After being beaten by her husband a woman lures him into a death trap to end the violence for once and for all.
My problem with the story is the lack of logic, unless it is a period piece why doesn’t she tell the authorities and divorce him? It won’t be nice but better than being beaten.
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Agreed with the above. I'll add that many writers often use this same description "...do everything it takes..." to no avail - it adds no detail and therefore is mostly useless in a logline. Best you describe the character as desperate so we can empathise with her desperation, otherwise (as DPG poinRead more
Agreed with the above.
I’ll add that many writers often use this same description “…do everything it takes…” to no avail – it adds no detail and therefore is mostly useless in a logline. Best you describe the character as desperate so we can empathise with her desperation, otherwise (as DPG pointed out) it would be hard for the audience to empathise with a killer.
See lessA time-traveling Jewish scientist goes back to 1891 to smother Hitler in his crib, only to return to the future to find out a different Fuhrer was able to win the war, making Europe a permanently enslaved continent and the U.S. its fascist ally. Now he has to return to the past, and kill himself before he can kill Hitler.
As Richiev wrote, simplify the premise to the bare components which have cause and effect relationship, cut all else. I would only add a description that enables him to time travel: After his plan to kill Hitler creates an even worse future, A desperate time traveler must go back in time to kill himRead more
As Richiev wrote, simplify the premise to the bare components which have cause and effect relationship, cut all else.
I would only add a description that enables him to time travel:
After his plan to kill Hitler creates an even worse future, A desperate time traveler must go back in time to kill himself before he kills Hitler in the crib.
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