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In order to get a job as a zookeeper, a former prostitute must convince the owners of an idyllic wildlife shelter to release their genetically valuable tiger to a questionable city zoo.
The stakes don't match up. In The Pursuit of Happiness the stakes were made clear, sleep in the subway and starve or put everything on the line. The MC had to make a choice that forced him to either have faith in himself - apply for an unpaid internship in order to get a life changing job, or not beRead more
The stakes don’t match up.
In The Pursuit of Happiness the stakes were made clear, sleep in the subway and starve or put everything on the line. The MC had to make a choice that forced him to either have faith in himself – apply for an unpaid internship in order to get a life changing job, or not believe in himself and give up custody on his son.
What are the stakes in this concept? What is her do or die moment? How will it be made visual?
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Agreed with the above. Is there a specific event that happens or action he does that makes the spirits visit him? You could make t so as a result of him doing one selfish act the spirits decide he needs to learn a lesson - in other words give him an inciting incident instead of a random visit for beRead more
Agreed with the above.
Is there a specific event that happens or action he does that makes the spirits visit him? You could make t so as a result of him doing one selfish act the spirits decide he needs to learn a lesson – in other words give him an inciting incident instead of a random visit for being a douche.
On? a side note, like Richiev I think this needs a distinctive element to help it stand out from the many other stories of a similar premise.
See lessIn order to get a job as a zookeeper, a former prostitute must convince the owners of an idyllic wildlife shelter to release their genetically valuable tiger to a questionable city zoo.
I hate to write what I think when it is only negative, so sorry for not being encouraging, but I fail to understand the story elements and stakes in this concept. I'm not sure why she needs to be a prostitute, nor do I see the connection to the subject matter and I simply don't understand the stakesRead more
I hate to write what I think when it is only negative, so sorry for not being encouraging, but I fail to understand the story elements and stakes in this concept.
I’m not sure why she needs to be a prostitute, nor do I see the connection to the subject matter and I simply don’t understand the stakes AT ALL.
If she is a prostitute at the start of the story and wants out of that life, why doesn’t she get a job as a waitress and take a course at a community college?
If she no longer works as a prostitute at the start of the story, what’s the problem? She can get on with her life and put her past behind her. She may need some emotional support or therapy, depending on the way she worked as a prostitute, but she will get over it.
If the story is about her overcoming an emotional trauma of life as a prostitute, it needs to be framed within that world. If she has emotional scars, the actions she takes to overcome them need to amount to a goal that clearly signifies an achievement of putting her former life behind her. While having a tiger transfer to a zoo could be seen as symbolic by some, it is not directly connected to the MC’s problem.
Her dream job can be anything, and working at a zoo doesn’t seem to be that big of a deal. No offense to zoo keepers, but unless she wants to be a veterinarian, I don’t see the great big challenge of getting a job at a zoo especially one that is described as questionable.
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