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In the year 3,000 since the hell-break an ex-soldier is helping group of small weasel-like creatures to cross hostile continent in search for their homeland. Part of the payment he receives is not simply a toy like he believes in the beginning but a mysterious powerful entity.
Agreed with Nicholas. Also, the wording is confusing in your logline. Loglines thrive on clarity if someone needs to double back during the read and piece together broken sentences the logline will fail in its goal. Brevity, clarity, simple sentences and correct grammar are essential regardless.
Agreed with Nicholas.
Also, the wording is confusing in your logline. Loglines thrive on clarity if someone needs to double back during the read and piece together broken sentences the logline will fail in its goal. Brevity, clarity, simple sentences and correct grammar are essential regardless.
See lessTwo forrest rangers, one a quiet loner and one a happily married father to be, while on the search for a child lost in the woods crash their helicopter far from any recognizable landmark they must survive the wilderness and find their way back.
Agreed with Nicholas. I'll add that boiled down to it, this is a survival story - man v wild. The most recent successful example of a similar example is 'The Grey', which just barely made it by the skin of its teeth (pun intended). I don't believe a mere survival story can make it today, especiallyRead more
Agreed with Nicholas.
I’ll add that boiled down to it, this is a survival story – man v wild. The most recent successful example of a similar example is ‘The Grey’, which just barely made it by the skin of its teeth (pun intended). I don’t believe a mere survival story can make it today, especially in lieu of having the likes of Bear Grills on TV. You need an additional layer of interest, most likely best served in form of an obstacle. The Grey used a pack of unusually dangerous wolves, what’s yours? Again only my opinion but the background story of searching for the child won’t do or isn’t enough.
See lessWhen a dedicated zookeeper ends up in an unorthodox animal shelter, she becomes fascinated by the back-to-basics-lifestyle of her unsociable boss and his adolescent son.
Agreed with DPG. I'll add that a story is best framed within a set sequence of events: Inciting incident, action, and goal. What is the inciting incident in this story? What motivates her to have to take action?
Agreed with DPG.
I’ll add that a story is best framed within a set sequence of events: Inciting incident, action, and goal.
What is the inciting incident in this story? What motivates her to have to take action?
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