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A socially awkward author from New York City only leaves his apartment at night until he falls in love with an ambitious politician who is spending every day in front of a camera.
I suggest you increase the psychological problem the author has, right now he comes across as uncomfortable in public - no biggie. What if he was an agoraphobe? What if he has a meltdown when in public during the day. Simply being socially awkward could describe a large portion of the population, anRead more
I suggest you increase the psychological problem the author has, right now he comes across as uncomfortable in public – no biggie.
See lessWhat if he was an agoraphobe? What if he has a meltdown when in public during the day. Simply being socially awkward could describe a large portion of the population, and likely present a lesser obstacle than agoraphobia or something similar.
When their worlds fall apart over the same week, three disenchanted, cash-strapped girlfriends make a pact to attempt three wild ways to make it big ? and get rich – fast.
Another thought is that you have a multi-protagonist plot, and while this is fine it's much harder to pull off - a single protagonist plot is hard enough much less three of them. So you may want to consider the need for three main characters as your protagonists. Does the sotrygenuanly require threeRead more
Another thought is that you have a multi-protagonist plot, and while this is fine it’s much harder to pull off – a single protagonist plot is hard enough much less three of them. So you may want to consider the need for three main characters as your protagonists. Does the sotrygenuanly require three or can it do with one?
Either way, if you stay with three MCs you need to give them the same goal and course of action, otherwise the plot will feel fragmented.
See lessWhen his memories are stolen and his life backup file altered, a security analyst must use clues hidden within his back up memories to recover a missing 3 weeks of his past that are the key to stopping a devastating attack.
It becomes a bit inceptiony at some point - which memory is and real which isn't. How would this be shown on camera, without him stopping and saying "wait a minute I remember booking a table for two but I live alone..." I more than anyone like a good sci-fi story, and I find your memory theft concepRead more
It becomes a bit inceptiony at some point – which memory is and real which isn’t.
How would this be shown on camera, without him stopping and saying “wait a minute I remember booking a table for two but I live alone…”
I more than anyone like a good sci-fi story, and I find your memory theft concept interesting, in fact, in 2013 I directed a stage play about a memory thief. However, in this instance, it feels rather contrived almost as if the story is a justification for a memory theft plot device than memory theft being a requirement of the story.
For example, what if in the world of your story memory storage is an option that most health plans come with. Most people pay the extra premium and get each year of their life stored away. Now if this is the case, I would expect that these storage facilities would be super secure, and only very few, if ever, memory theft cases are reported. The MC suddenly suffers amnesia as a result of an accident, his memory has been wiped clean – inciting incident.
He is told at the hospital that he has health insurance and as part of his plan he has memory recovery for all his memories up until the beginning of that year. He then gets his memories installed back in his noggin, but must figure out the missing few months on his own. In his investigation to get back the last few months, he finds clues that indicate a malicious intent. He actually discovers records of file alteration in his memory storage, and must now find the person who altered them to get his real memories back – goal.
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