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A terminally ill girl stops taking her medication to end her suffering, only to feel better discovering she is a victim of her mother’s munchausen by proxy
I think best to describe her realisation that her mother is poisoning her as the inciting incident, and escaping the mother as her goal. After she realises her mother is poisoning her as a desperate act of Munchausen?syndrome, she must stop taking the meds in order to get strong enough to escape.
I think best to describe her realisation that her mother is poisoning her as the inciting incident, and escaping the mother as her goal.
After she realises her mother is poisoning her as a desperate act of Munchausen?syndrome, she must stop taking the meds in order to get strong enough to escape.
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What DPG wrote. Also, best to specify a starting point for your story. Currently the logline describes the story starting after he develops problems, but this could take any shape, form or?amount of time. Best to specify one single event that pushed him over the edge, instead of a vague sequence ofRead more
What DPG wrote.
Also, best to specify a starting point for your story. Currently the logline describes the story starting after he develops problems, but this could take any shape, form or?amount of time. Best to specify one single event that pushed him over the edge, instead of a vague sequence of events occurring over an arbitrary amount of time.
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Too few details and too many vague descriptions in this logline. As DPG pointed out, what? Who? Why? Where. Regarding the?structure, you mention the inciting incident at the end: "...his adventurous best friend whom the spirit-god has possessed?". Best to relocate your inciting incident to the startRead more
Too few details and too many vague descriptions in this logline.
As DPG pointed out, what? Who? Why? Where.
Regarding the?structure, you mention the inciting incident at the end: “…his adventurous best friend whom the spirit-god has possessed?”. Best to relocate your inciting incident to the start of the logline, so the reader can understand the premise and motivation when the first read the logline.
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