I’m glad that the mere act of writing out your thoughts on the matter helped, I often find that helps me as well – I have several email drafts that never left the outbox…

Reading through your explanation I find no valid justification?for a dual protagonist outside the fact that you’ve already written it. That said, as the old idiom goes; writing is re writing, and I strongly suggest you consider re writing it. The logline?seems unnecessarily complicated and your description of the?characters indicates, to some extent, a blur of archetypes.

Perhaps consider the time poor executives who will have to read (if you’re lucky) your logline then (if you’re even more lucky) your?script, will they have the patients to sit through multiple pages of script in order to understand the dual protagonist plot and its necessities?

Here is an attempt at simplifying the logline:

V1 – After a vampire-supremicist declares war on humanity, his lieutenant must enlist the help of a baroness to build a resistance in order to defeat the vampire and save the world.

The baroness is an ally and the goal is to save the world.

V2 – After a vampire-supremicist declares war on humanity, a baroness must convince?his lieutenant to defect and?help build a resistance in order to defeat the vampire and save the world.

The lieutenant is the ally and the goal is to save the world.