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In a modern European country, a deadly terrorist group carries out an attack, a naive young school dropout must get would-be victims to safety.
The interesting part about the logline is that he is being set up, however the vague nature of the inciting incident raises too many questions with regards to the "how and why" of the situation.As the logline lacks detail with regards to the specific events, and actions taken with in them, it seemsRead more
The interesting part about the logline is that he is being set up, however the vague nature of the inciting incident raises too many questions with regards to the “how and why” of the situation.
As the logline lacks detail with regards to the specific events, and actions taken with in them, it seems like another setup story only with slightly more topical subject matter. It’s the particulars of your story and the inner journey of the MC that will help you write a compelling script and make it a must read.
In other words, his mentor sets him up, but how does this happen and why?
Must stop the plot – what plot? Will it happen around a big summit or major event? And what kind of attack?
These are all the details that will make your story unique and therefore interesting.
See lessIn a modern European country, a deadly terrorist group carries out an attack, a naive young school dropout must get would-be victims to safety.
How does he get setup to carry out an attack? Does he not realise what is in a bag given to him? The premise raises too many plausibility issues as terrorist are usually heavily brain washed and very clear on what they need to do in order to put other people in harms way. So, either he is a terrorisRead more
How does he get setup to carry out an attack? Does he not realise what is in a bag given to him?
The premise raises too many plausibility issues as terrorist are usually heavily brain washed and very clear on what they need to do in order to put other people in harms way.
So, either he is a terrorist (a recent convert or not is irrelevant) and he changes his mind when reality hits him and he sees the people he sets out to hurt, or he is an idiot and has no idea what he is doing. If the latter the audience will likely not empathize with him, but if the former then he has? a clear journey of learning and in my opinion a far more interesting one.
See lessFrom the moment Dae Stallard gets the unwanted news that his girlfriend is pregnant, the journey of a young, self-absorbed man becoming a flawed but loving father begins, ending with the high school graduation of his child.
As previously mentioned best to focus your logline on the outer goal that the MC MUST achieve, not just a choice or inner journey as these need to be implied but not specified in the logline.
As previously mentioned best to focus your logline on the outer goal that the MC MUST achieve, not just a choice or inner journey as these need to be implied but not specified in the logline.
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