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When an intellectual couple with contempt for each other entertain an opportunist and his wife their narcissistic mind games turn more sinister and destructive than planned – Who’s Afraid of Virginia Woolf? 1966
An intellectual is to vague a description, best to state what he is - a professor.This is a tough one to write a logline as the story centers on the inner conflicts between husband and wife with out any externally visual goals. I think the play, and later movie, is really about how a husband and wifRead more
An intellectual is to vague a description, best to state what he is – a professor.
This is a tough one to write a logline as the story centers on the inner conflicts between husband and wife with out any externally visual goals. I think the play, and later movie, is really about how a husband and wife learn to accept the death of their only son. The tension is bought about by the conflict they have as a result of the son being mentioned, in a round-about way, in front of other people and the resolution is the tension dissipating.
See lessA grieving mother uses ancient magic to resurrect her recently deceased daughter despite her own mother?s dire warnings resulting in deadly consequences for those closest to her.
You describe a situation but not a plot. What is the story about? What will the mother actually do? In other words best to redraft this logline with a clear goal for the mother to pursue.Secondly the description of: "...deadly consequences for those closest to her..." is not specific enough, the conRead more
You describe a situation but not a plot. What is the story about? What will the mother actually do? In other words best to redraft this logline with a clear goal for the mother to pursue.
Secondly the description of: “…deadly consequences for those closest to her…” is not specific enough, the consequences need to be understood not just hinted at. Otherwise the stakes aren’t clear and the tension drops.
See lessAfter leaving prison, two aging con men go straight by opening a coffee shop but get pulled into mob-like turf war with the other caf?s in a small seaside town.
More often than not lengthy constructive and well thought out responses are misunderstood, and perceived by the logliner as a negative attitude on the reviewer's behalf. Nothing could be further from the truth, as most of the reviewers dedicate time to read and understand your loglines and in theirRead more
More often than not lengthy constructive and well thought out responses are misunderstood, and perceived by the logliner as a negative attitude on the reviewer’s behalf. Nothing could be further from the truth, as most of the reviewers dedicate time to read and understand your loglines and in their own way help out. What is seen as negative could just be a rushed response that mentions key points, still helpful and considerate though.
About this logline. It reads as if them getting pulled into the turf war is the inciting incident, best to bring this in earlier and, as DPG mentioned, give them a goal.
If this is a dual protagonist plot then their outer journey should be the same where as their inner journeys can be different from each others, as a result of this best to mention the outer journey only. If you try and describe an inner journey for each character, the logline will be rather long and possibly confusing.
My try:
See lessAfter two ex cons go strait as caffe shop owners, they get caught up in a coffee turf war and must win the national barista Olympics to prove their mochachino-frappe-latte is the top dog of all coffees.