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When a young psychic girl becomes the victim of abuse she must use her ethereal powers to stop the horror and find a path to normality.
The nature of the initial abuse is important as it is the inciting incident; was she tortured, mutilated, raped? This is the event that motivates her to take action and therefore the more sever the abuse the more powerful her actions.
The nature of the initial abuse is important as it is the inciting incident; was she tortured, mutilated, raped? This is the event that motivates her to take action and therefore the more sever the abuse the more powerful her actions.
See lessA father?s poor decision causes a tragic event that haunts his son?s every move, leading him to a life of drugs and solitude.
But you need a goal or else there is no plot. Think of a goal as a vital component not just an add on, it is the binding companion to the inciting incident. Here is a quick re word of the latest draft to help: After his criminal father accidentally kills his whole family, a depressed drug addict musRead more
But you need a goal or else there is no plot.
Think of a goal as a vital component not just an add on, it is the binding companion to the inciting incident.
Here is a quick re word of the latest draft to help:
After his criminal father accidentally kills his whole family, a depressed drug addict must…
Without a goal the logline is incomplete.
The main character sound interesting he has a clear flaw and a powerful inciting incident now he needs a well conceived goal.
See lessA suicidal teen gets abducted from her boring life and is forced to compete in the ninetieth Trials, a three-staged competition that rewards the victor a cognitive transplantation with a coldhearted AI.
Agreed with DPG. You could try changing her to volunteering to take part in the Trials. This way, seeing as she is suicidal, her inner journey is to overcome her flaw of wanting to kill her self.? She can learn that her death is not a good solution and chooses to survive the Trials once she's in. ThRead more
Agreed with DPG.
You could try changing her to volunteering to take part in the Trials. This way, seeing as she is suicidal, her inner journey is to overcome her flaw of wanting to kill her self.? She can learn that her death is not a good solution and chooses to survive the Trials once she’s in. The story needs a new good inciting incident if this is the case though.
Secondly the description of the Trials as a three stage competition is redundant, all that is important is the outcome of the Trials not their competition structure.
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