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When a self-doubting boxer is offered a shot at the heavyweight title of the world, he must fight the fear inside to win the battle in the ring. (Rocky)
Rocky was plagued with self doubt which indeed laid the base for his inner journey, but a logline should describe the plot about the main character achieving his or her outer goal. In this case his goal was to beat the champ, he was happy to settle on lasting the full 12 rounds but none the less theRead more
Rocky was plagued with self doubt which indeed laid the base for his inner journey, but a logline should describe the plot about the main character achieving his or her outer goal. In this case his goal was to beat the champ, he was happy to settle on lasting the full 12 rounds but none the less the point of a match is to win. The odds were stacked against him considering how well equipped Apollo was and impoverished he was, therefore the cooler-room meat punching and famous steps climbing scenes were depicted as victorious achievements.
When a poverty stricken boxer is offered a shot at the heavyweight championship, he must rely on his willpower to overcome his lack of resources in order to seizes the opportunity of a lifetime and beat the champ.
See lessWhen an incorruptible young girl finds herself hired by a gang of thugs she faces prison time unless she can cover up or reverse their last crime.
What DPG wrote. Also the logline is too long and delays plot descriptions until very late in the read, essentially everything before "...she discovers her caring employees are none other than the notorious underworld criminals..." can be deleted. Otherwise in the next draft best to describe an eventRead more
What DPG wrote.
Also the logline is too long and delays plot descriptions until very late in the read, essentially everything before “…she discovers her caring employees are none other than the notorious underworld criminals…” can be deleted.
Otherwise in the next draft best to describe an event that motivates her to pursue an outer goal, where as her inner journey of learning the importance of either loyalty or honesty should only be hinted at in her flaw.
See lessThe true story of the militant suffrage leader imprisoned in 1917 for picketing the White House and given 48 hours to prove her sanity or be committed to an insane asylum.
Proving her sanity entails proving that certain powerful people are conspiring for her to be falsely committed. If she manages to expose the conspiracy then she will prove that there is no justification for her to be committed i.e not insane.As DPG elaborated she didn't end up in an asylum and the tRead more
Proving her sanity entails proving that certain powerful people are conspiring for her to be falsely committed. If she manages to expose the conspiracy then she will prove that there is no justification for her to be committed i.e not insane.
As DPG elaborated she didn’t end up in an asylum and the the truth was surfaced one way or another, this means that the mechanism of the premise did work in reality and can make for a believable and interesting story.
Her own suffering should be but the tip whereas the rest of the ice burg is the fight for the greater good. In the same way that Gandhi suffered for India, his personal suffering was just a small part of the fight for his whole nation.
It’s these bigger stakes that will make the story particularly interesting. Therefore if the principle antagonist is a politician or rival chauvinist speaker and not a staff member in the asylum, women’s rights remain the stakes as appose to personal comfort.
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