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  1. Posted: February 16, 2016In: Adventure

    After a car crash leaves him unable to walk and dying of thirst, an inventor and his physically-disabled cousin must traverse the harsh Australian desert using only her electric wheelchair.

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    Added an answer on February 17, 2016 at 11:36 am

    Agreed about the wheel chair, it is an original addition to the survival tale. Most survival plots are about a perfectly fit person who deteriorates over time in their exposure to the elements and lack of resources, only through their tenacity do they figure out ways to survive the harsh conditions.Read more

    Agreed about the wheel chair, it is an original addition to the survival tale.
    Most survival plots are about a perfectly fit person who deteriorates over time in their exposure to the elements and lack of resources, only through their tenacity do they figure out ways to survive the harsh conditions.

    In this instance you introduced an element that starts the survival off with a handy-cap, this means the obstacle is even greater to overcome.

    One thing though, in most successful survival plots there is a personal element that motivates the main character to defy the odds and survive.? It was the girlfriend in Cast Away, revenge for his son in The Revenant and visions of his child to be in 127 Hours, what personal element can you add to this as a motivation for the main character?

    Also I believe if the inventor him self was wheel chair bound and he had to survive on his own the stakes would be even greater. Having one able body between them means he could walk ahead and get help, but on his own he has to invent in-order to survive or else.

    Secondly the placement of “…dying of thirst…” is confusing, as the car accident didn’t make them die of thirst rather the conditions did, perhaps change it to:
    After a car crash in the Australian outback a disabled inventor must engineer the worlds most efficient solar panel in-order to trek back to civilization before he dies of thirst using nothing but his electric wheel chair.

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  2. Posted: February 16, 2016In: Drama

    The Devil at My Door. A young woman is visited by a messenger with news about the death of her husband. The messenger, she perceives is the Devil himself. Everything she knows about the fighting in the Middle East was grizzly and tragic. From the media and her husband?s letters, she learned to have nothing but contempt and hatred for these tyrants who had no regard for their own people. And now, one of these people were at her door.

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    Added an answer on February 17, 2016 at 11:15 am

    In that case, as mentioned above, best to re draft the logline to reflect his dilemma and action throughout the story.

    In that case, as mentioned above, best to re draft the logline to reflect his dilemma and action throughout the story.

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  3. Posted: February 16, 2016In: Comedy

    Succesful lawer from Moscaw is obsessed with an american porn star, all attemts to meet her in person fail untill a brilliant idea comes to his mind to press charges against her.

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    Added an answer on February 17, 2016 at 11:06 am

    I see. I think the problem is you currently have 2 goals set out for the main character; professional success and a personal relationship. Pick one and re draft the logline to focus on the chosen goal.

    I see.

    I think the problem is you currently have 2 goals set out for the main character; professional success and a personal relationship.
    Pick one and re draft the logline to focus on the chosen goal.

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