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A secretly dying filmmaker goes to the Blue Mountains to shoot her final film. As her marriage and the production fall apart, the ghost of a local murder victim has her questioning what her life’s work truly is.
Agreed with DPG and Richiev. In addition, what starts her off on her journey to shoot the film? Why now and not a year ago?? If it was the discovery that she is dying you can use this as a ticking time bomb and inciting incident i.e: After she is given a year to live, a cancer diagnosed film maker mRead more
Agreed with DPG and Richiev.
In addition, what starts her off on her journey to shoot the film? Why now and not a year ago?? If it was the discovery that she is dying you can use this as a ticking time bomb and inciting incident i.e:
After she is given a year to live, a cancer diagnosed film maker must complete her last film but…
The part about her marriage breaking apart seams redundant in the logline and unrelated to the plot, as it will be emotionally difficult but not an obstacle per say.
Lastly (this may have been already mentioned but is important) what is her goal? Does she want to get into Cannas, Sundance or win an Oscar? Producing a film is a challenge, but if she is a film maker then she has presumably already done so in the past. Therefore her goal in this case should be a greater challenge than just producing a film.
See lessThe Devil’s Cruise – On a family vacation cruise a father lost his daughter thru Somalian pirates and will now choose between saving her daughter or his business.
What Richieve said. How can the audience empathize with a father that doesn't instinctively choose to save his daughter? And best to start with the inciting incident - After his daughter is kidnapped by Somalian pirates...
What Richieve said.
How can the audience empathize with a father that doesn’t instinctively choose to save his daughter?
And best to start with the inciting incident – After his daughter is kidnapped by Somalian pirates…
See lessOn the verge of capture, Vera, a peevish teenage Jew, flees the Nazi invasion of her Romanian village and crosses paths with a British secret service agent who reluctantly mentors her after she learns of her family?s murder. When her mentor is exposed as a double agent, she launches a vicious global vendetta to bring Nazi war criminals to justice before they can disappear into post-WWII hiding.
You shouldn't need to explain the need for a mentor in a logline, as mentors are archetypes often used in many genres. To that matter the presence of a mentor may work well in the story, but their mention in the logline is not necessary either.
You shouldn’t need to explain the need for a mentor in a logline, as mentors are archetypes often used in many genres. To that matter the presence of a mentor may work well in the story, but their mention in the logline is not necessary either.
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